Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, In several countries, family members work together in their family business. Both sides advantages and drawback. From my perspective people should work together because they success quickly and improve their living standards. I will discuss some relevant points and examples.

On the one hand, a large number of people work together in their family business. They discuss problems with their family members easily without nervous and approach better solution. One of the most important aspect is that they learn new skills and learn how to cummunicate with others and gain knowledge from parents. For instance, one brother has stuck in difficult problems they without nervous easily assists with their elder brother and quickly solve their problems. As a result, they reduce stress and stay away from diseases. Furthermore, they spend time too much with their family members and build strong relationship.

On the other hand, numerous people do not work together in their family business. This is because they have not strong relation together. They cannot talk each other. Moreover, some people overthink about business. To illustrate this point, they eating dinner together but discuss business problem. As a result, they automatically increase stress and affect their health. One of the major point several individuals all the time fight together and cannot discuss their problems. Furthermore, they cannot improve their living standards quickly.

To sum up, In many countries, people often argue family members work together in their family business. In my opinion, people work together in their family business this is because they easily talk together without nervous and anxiety and improve their living standards quickly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear preference for family members working together, especially in the introduction and conclusion, and you include relevant points about sharing problems, learning from relatives, stress, and family relationships. However, the response only partly answers whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages: it presents both sides but does not directly compare their importance or explain why the benefits are greater overall. Several points are asserted rather than developed, such as the claim that working together improves living standards quickly. The example about a brother facing a difficult problem is relevant but unclear and needs more specific detail. To strengthen the response, state your comparison explicitly and develop each main reason with a clear explanation or realistic example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting points, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its basic organisation. You also use signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To sum up.” However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from problem-solving to skills, health, and relationships without clearly linking these ideas. Some connections are unclear, particularly “one brother has stuck in difficult problems they…” and the shift from family arguments to living standards. Repeated transitions such as “Furthermore” and “As a result” sometimes feel mechanical rather than showing a precise relationship. Organise each paragraph around one central claim, then explain and illustrate it in a clear sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “business,” “skills,” “knowledge,” “stress,” and “living standards,” which allows you to communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. Examples include “Both sides advantages and drawback,” “approach better solution,” and “they have not strong relation together.” There are also spelling errors, such as “cummunicate,” and awkward expressions such as “spend time too much.” Aim to learn common collocations for discussing benefits and drawbacks, and check spelling and word forms. More precise phrases would help you explain your ideas without relying on repeated general words such as “people,” “problems,” and “together.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, using structures such as “This is because…” and “As a result…,” but the range is limited and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors occur frequently in sentence formation, agreement, articles, and verb patterns. For example, “Both sides advantages and drawback” is not a complete sentence, while “One of the most important aspect is” has an agreement error. The example beginning “one brother has stuck…” combines clauses without a clear grammatical structure, and “they eating dinner together” is missing an auxiliary verb. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, including unnecessary capitals after commas or at the start of the conclusion. Practise building accurate complete sentences before adding clauses, and check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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