Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, in various countries family business members were like to work together, rather than separately work. So it can help to family business to grow more and also have support of the family member. I belive that it is more prons compare to cons to work together in their family business.

One siginificant advantage of family business is that got trust member of your family that don't have any tension. To elobrate this, having own family member which we easily trust to that person and also give him responsibility to handle the family business, even in any situation that family member will always stands behind us. For instance, In Indian families mostly they were having family business and also give him responsibility of financing work or any bank related work that we can easily trust that person.

Another main prons is that, having own family member in business also helps to save employment cost and help to rise our profits. To explain this, having different member in family that help to create in different fields as many people have some skills to work so by that way they can divide that work and also saves employee cost which that help them to rise their business profit. For example, In USA motel mostly people were runs by family member that every year by not keeping employee that saves around 45% of their profit every year.

In conclusion, Family business were helpful that can trust member and become tension free and by working together it will also save employment cost and helps our business to grow more.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You answer the question directly and maintain a clear view that family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages. The two relevant reasons—trust between relatives and reduced employment costs—are supported with examples, including family members handling financial work and family-run motels. This addresses the task, but the ideas are not developed equally or fully: the trust point is explained in general terms, while the motel example’s claim about saving 45% of profits is not clarified or supported. You also do not discuss any disadvantages, despite the question inviting a comparison. To strengthen the response, explain how the benefits affect a business in practice and briefly acknowledge a possible drawback, such as family disagreements, before showing why the advantages outweigh it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your position, two body paragraphs present separate advantages, and a conclusion restates the main points. This logical arrangement makes the argument easy to follow. You also use signposting such as “For instance,” “To explain this,” and “In conclusion,” and the paragraphs each have a recognisable focus. However, some linking is mechanical, with similar explanatory phrases repeated, and a few references are unclear—for example, “that person” and “that help them” do not always point smoothly to a specific person or idea. The conclusion mostly repeats earlier claims rather than drawing them together. Use a wider range of natural transitions and make references explicit to improve the flow further.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “family business,” “responsibility,” “financing,” “employment cost,” and “profits.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts of the response awkward or less clear. Examples include “more prons compare to cons,” “got trust member,” and “rise our profits”; these are not natural English expressions. There are also repeated uses of “family member” and “business,” which restrict variety. Build a bank of accurate phrases for discussing advantages and business operations, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise choices such as “advantages outweigh the disadvantages” and “reduce staffing costs” would make your argument clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including explanations introduced by “To elaborate” and examples introduced by “For instance.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent. For example, “family business members were like to work together” has an incorrect verb construction, while “that family member will always stands behind us” combines an incorrect modal pattern with a tense/agreement problem. In “having different member in family,” number and article forms are also inaccurate. Some long sentences join several ideas without clear grammatical structure, which makes them harder to read. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and modal constructions, then use shorter, controlled sentences before adding subordinate clauses.

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