Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic:
In many countries, family members work together in their family business.
Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
In today's world, many people are blessed with a family business, and households who have their own business find it a very valuable asset, as it adds notable value to their lives personally and financially. In my opinion, this trend has more merits than demerits. This essay will support my opinion with relevant examples.
To begin with, family businesses provide career opportunities to family members at the very start of their careers, which enables faster learning for them than for a person who works for someone else because learning opportunities at a job depend on business needs rather than personal interest. Moreover, when family members work together, it helps families to strengthen their family bonding. Having said that, it also streamlines decision-making within the company and avoids delays and losses due to mismanagement. For example, my dad runs our family business, and it helped me a lot to start my career after my graduation. In addition, it became very easy to get experience in all departments. My father is the only decision-maker; hence, it helps us to run our business very smoothly without any conflicts.
On the other hand, many times when family members work together, it creates problems within families, which affects their relations with their family members. For example, one of my friends has a huge family business with a turnover of 200 million dollars; however, their business faced a decline when they had a family dispute over power and position among the family members. Furthermore, many times when a person with fewer skills gets better benefits just because they have family ties in the company, it creates a bad impression on other employees who are more hardworking. As a result, it could become one of the reasons for poor work productivity and efficiency.
To sum up, family businesses not only add value to family members' lives but also help people around them to uplift their lives by providing them with a better source of income. That is why there is a saying in India: one family business can help many in society.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.0 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, providing a clear position that family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages. The ideas are relevant and supported by personal examples, such as the mention of the author's father's business and the friend's company. The development is generally logical, though the conclusion introduces a new point about 'uplifting lives' and 'society' that was not previously discussed in the body paragraphs. To reach a higher band, ensure that all points mentioned in the conclusion have been thoroughly explored in the main body of the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', 'On the other hand', and 'To sum up' are used effectively to guide the reader through the argument. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the advantages from the disadvantages. The progression of ideas is generally smooth, although the transition between the personal example and the broader societal impact in the conclusion could be more tightly integrated to improve the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
The vocabulary is sufficient for the task and allows for clear communication. There is an attempt to use less common items like 'streamlines', 'mismanagement', and 'turnover'. However, some phrasing is slightly repetitive or basic, such as 'many times' used twice in the third paragraph. The use of 'blessed with a family business' is a nice touch, but overall, the range could be expanded to include more precise collocations and sophisticated academic vocabulary to demonstrate greater flexibility.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There is generally good control over grammar, and errors are infrequent and do not impede communication. For instance, 'one of my friends has a huge family business... however, their business faced a decline' is a well-constructed complex sentence. There are minor issues with punctuation and occasional awkward phrasing, such as 'it helps us to run our business very smoothly', but these do not detract significantly from the overall clarity of the writing.
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