Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays , most of people have their own familiy business ,they prefer to do work with their family members instead outsite.

Intially, wroking with their own family members is beneficial for all because they do need to hire people from outside and they can save the money . Family business if they work together they have good understanding and better communication. They can easily share their thought with each others without any hesitation.For example, In India there are numerous family business ,they work hard together and get the success as well. Suit designs is the most famous business In India people work together and earn good money.

However, there also disadvantages if people work with their family. Most of peole Pressure while doing work with family. Sometimes when personal family problems comes it may affect the business.Family members may spend too much time working together. For example, In the UK jack and son's they have ther own restaurant . In their restaurant they have family for work , they do not like each other and people saw them fight mostly front of customers.While hold the negative impact on business.

In Concclusion, I believe that when people work with family it become most of the time arguments and dependent own the other people. Which is hold negative impact on the business. Most of the time yong people try something new.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address both advantages and disadvantages of family businesses, presenting some relevant ideas such as cost-saving, better communication, and potential personal conflicts. However, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting detail. For instance, the example regarding 'Suit designs' in India is vague and lacks context. Furthermore, the response fails to meet the minimum length requirement, containing only 229 words instead of the required 250 words, which places a constraint on the overall development of the task. Because of the under-length penalty and the under-development of supporting arguments, the task achievement is limited.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into four paragraphs, showing a basic attempt at a logical structure with introductory, body, and concluding sections. However, coherence is hindered by frequent mechanical and faulty cohesive devices, such as 'Intially', 'In Concclusion', and abrupt transitions between sentences. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak due to repetitive referencing and abrupt shifts in ideas. The progression of ideas is not always clear, and sentences often feel disconnected, which pulls the overall score down to this band level.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, such as 'good money', 'work together', and 'family business'. There are noticeable lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'familiy', 'outsite', 'wroking', 'peole', 'Concclusion', and 'yong'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic, the frequent errors and limited range mean the response falls into the lower bands for lexical resource. Less common lexical items are attempted but are either misspelled or used inaccurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and error-prone attempts at complex structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, incorrect verb forms, and missing prepositions, such as 'they do need to hire' instead of 'they do not need to hire', 'personal family problems comes', and 'Which is hold negative impact'. Punctuation and spacing errors are also prevalent throughout the essay. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a weak control of basic sentence patterns.

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