Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There are varies for country ,paersts and adults work together in there oun business acording to me family bussiness is good .

I thinks Home businesses have a lots of advantages rether than disadvantages ,because i sew alots of family grown up in fornt of my eyes.

there are lots of denifits in a family bussinesses.first all family work together they spend most of the time with there family,seconedly parests did't worrie about there childern future.because they konw when they childern are grown up they jion his home bussinesse.some family started there own bussinesses at home that is also a goood.they did't need send there childer for far work .

now days every one want to start there own busisses because every one want to a rich.now days i watch the so many add on my phone people advesting there and socail media also help the people,who want to start there own businesses.I read the survey that is published in newspaper there acorrding to past 10 years and in 2025 family businesses 57%grow up .young genration did't want to the work whole day there only went smart work.

in concolios home businesses is good for every one because they stay home and wrok with family.and its busnessisesgrown up genreation to genreation.,so that is why every one went there own family businesesses

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages. However, the candidate fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, stopping at only 221 words. Furthermore, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive, focusing mainly on spending time with family and children's futures without broader exploration. While a personal position is stated, the arguments remain under-developed and lack sufficient extension or supporting examples. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, aligning with the criteria for Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the text is hindered by very weak paragraphing and a lack of clear progression. The candidate attempts to use basic cohesive devices such as "first", "seconedly", and "now days", but these are often mechanically applied or inaccurate. Referencing is frequently unclear, with pronouns like "they" and "there" confusingly interchanged (e.g., "when they childern are grown up"). There is no clear overall logical progression between ideas, and the conclusion ("in concolios") is abrupt and poorly integrated. These issues place the response firmly in Band 4.0 for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and heavily impacted by pervasive spelling errors. Words such as "varies", "paerts", "bussiness", "denifits", and "concolios" demonstrate a very limited control over word formation and spelling. While the candidate attempts some topic-related vocabulary like "generation", "survey", and "advertising", the sheer frequency of lexical errors and non-standard forms significantly strains the reader and impedes understanding, reflecting the descriptors for Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and frequently faulty sentence structures. There are constant errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement (e.g., "parests did't worrie"), tense usage, and sentence boundary errors, such as massive run-on sentences and comma splices. Punctuation and capitalization are also largely neglected throughout the text. Because errors are frequent, systematic, and often distort the intended meaning, the writing meets the criteria for Band 4.0.

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