Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

globally, people prefer to join their family businesses. in my opinion it has more pros than cons.

joining family business could lead to more profit. moreover, if family mermber participate in the business than all the share and the tunover of the is divided into the family and all the decisions are taken by the family, consiquenlty growh of the business. for example, ambani's have family business started by the father of mukesh ambani, now its run by the mukesh ambani's and his sonsand daughter with the industries like jio sim, ambanis taxtile companies and now he is the most richest man of india.

enticipating in family business could be interduce new talent.furthermore, most of the businessmen people children study in reputative schools where all the students belong too businessmen families and the students gain lot of ides from sharing their thoughts with each others and when they join their family business they show their talent and creativity in their business. as a result businessbecome more successful in the compititiveworld.

leading family indusries could lead discriminatrion in family members . when allthe family member work together they bring their family problems in the business andthey cannot balnce their personal andprofessional life as a result low efficiency and more problems at workplace.

overall, i think joining family businessis very helful in todays era, and it also build and bring newideas talent which help the business to survive on the other hand family also need to balance thier work and balance life so they not intrupting theeir business.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages, taking a clear position in the introduction ("in my opinion it has more pros than cons"). The writer puts forward relevant ideas, such as financial growth and the introduction of new talent, alongside a counter-argument regarding potential discrimination and work-life balance issues. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and occasionally hampered by unclear expression. For instance, the discussion of the Ambani family provides a concrete example of commercial success, but the sentence structure obscures the argument. Overall, the task is addressed with relevant main ideas, placing the response securely in Band 6.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear paragraph-by-paragraph structure that separates the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are used to signal logical links, such as "moreover", "furthermore", and "overall". However, referencing and mechanical cohesion are sometimes faulty, leading to abrupt transitions and run-on sentences. For example, the sentence starting with "moreover, if family mermber participate..." is overly long and difficult to follow. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion requires better sentence boundary control to achieve a higher score. This performance aligns with Band 5.5, rounded to Band 6 given the clear structural layout.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting less common lexical items such as "tunover", "compititiveworld", and "discrimatrion". However, there are numerous spelling errors and inaccurate word choices throughout the text (e.g., "mermber", "consiquenlty", "growh", "enticipating" instead of participating, and "interduce"). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general message, the high frequency of spelling and morphological inaccuracies restricts the score to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating conditional structures and relative clauses. However, grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent punctuation and capitalization errors, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters ("globally", "in my opinion"). Furthermore, numerous syntactic errors occur, such as "ambani's have family business started by the father... now its run by the mukesh ambani's and his sonsand daughter" and missing articles or incorrect verb forms ("businessbecome", "they not intrupting theeir business"). These errors frequently cause strain for the reader, placing the grammar performance at Band 5.0.

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