Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic:
In many countries, family members work together in their family business.
Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Family business plays a crucial role in generating a significant amount of income. However, there are numerous families are running their own businesses together in many nations. From my perspective, there are several benefits and drawbacks which will be explained in the upcoming paragraph.
To commence with, there are many benefits of doing their own occupation. First and foremost is that straightforward path. In addition, individuals do not need to search any kind of job outside and can focus on this field which is related to their family businesses such as cloths store, laundry shop and soon. Therefore, they can save large amount of time and contribute in their own businesses. Secondly, They can acuire many valuable skills such as leadership, teamwork and coopeartion with each other. Besides this, They do not need to do any effoert and hardwork to get promotions and higher wages because of their family occupation. Consequently, they feel comfortable and convenient for following their business.
However, there are few demarits of being part of their own family business. Firstly, Pupils have become totally dependant their own work rahther than using a skills, ideas and techniques in another fields. Additionally, They can not take knowlegde and infomation of another business ideas. So, they become lethargetic and narrow mind for taking their own work. Another one drawback is that faces some crisis and bank currupted. Sometimes own businesses face some loses then all family members is suffered from stress. Therefore, every members to choose a different types of work in different companies for saving a money.
To sum up, although there are plethora of demarits of doing family occupation, we can not ignore its merits which are generating a good source of money and make easier and comfortabel to fulfill all basic amenties of life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of family businesses, presenting a clear position. The introduction outlines that there are benefits and drawbacks, and the body paragraphs attempt to develop these points. However, some ideas are under-developed or expressed unclearly, such as the notion of a 'straightforward path' or the slightly confused phrasing regarding individuals becoming narrow-minded. Furthermore, the final paragraph mentions that family members should choose different types of work to save money, which slightly contradicts the premise of evaluating family businesses. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, placing this performance at Band 6.0 based on the description of addressing all parts of the task with some under-developed ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Transitional markers such as 'To commence with', 'First and foremost', 'However', and 'To sum up' are employed to structure the response. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes faulty or mechanical. For instance, phrases like 'Another one drawback is that faces some crisis and bank currupted' show poor logical connection and awkward integration within the sentence structure. Paragraphing is present, but the overall progression is occasionally hindered by abrupt shifts in ideas and awkward transitions. Therefore, a Band 5.5 is appropriate for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student attempts a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, such as 'significant amount of income', 'leadership', 'teamwork', and 'cooperation'. However, there are frequent word choice and spelling errors throughout the response, including 'cloths' instead of 'clothing', 'soon' instead of 'so on', 'acuire', 'copeartion', 'effoert', 'dependant their own work rahther', 'lethargetic', 'narrow mind', and 'bank currupted'. These lexical errors and awkward collocations occasionally impede communication and restrict the vocabulary score to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak. There are frequent errors in verb forms, prepositions, and sentence structure, such as 'there are numerous families are running', 'do not need to search any kind of job', 'every members to choose', and 'all family members is suffered'. Punctuation and word forms are also problematic in sentences like 'Pupils have become totally dependant their own work rahther than using a skills'. These recurring errors can cause difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar performance firmly at a Band 5.0.
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