Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic:
In many countries, family members work together in their family business.
Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
It is certainly true that majority of people like to continue their forefather business in many nations.According to my perspective, although this idea comprises some undesireable effect on the young generation but the positives of it are far more fruitful.
To commence with pointing out the negative of work in family business.First of all,family business can not grow properly.In other words, some members of family want to start their own business in different field.In this situation, they are unable to take interest in this business.Moreover,young onces can not set their life goals.because they know very well that they will continue their family business,and do not think differentely,which they can get more profit.For instance, if someone father run grocery store then their children less likely to think to become doctor,engineer,pilot and many other jobs,which have more profit than their father work.Hence, these are the demerits of doing work in family business.
On the other side,people can get number of advanges by doing family business.They get a opportunity to make strong relationship with their other family members in same workplace.In addition,when family members work together then they can solve the problem easily.Therefore they take less stress about their work.Apart froom these, they can enjoy work and can go holiday without taking permission.They just need to inform them.Furthermore, each family member has different talent including managing things properly, finance knowledge,marketing stratergy and so many other skills. These things help to make family business grow.Moving further,it is easy to understand the family business for youngsters because their parents teach then whole things without taking any charges.Thus, they can easily continue their business after completeting their study.
In conclusion,though family business has some merits including less chance to strart other business which have more profit and unable to show their creativity in different sectors,i think postives of this,can help to make strong bond,all creative mind work together which help to business grow,young onces can continue family business with zero investment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of family businesses and presents a clear position. Ideas are presented and supported, although some points, particularly in the discussion of disadvantages, are slightly under-developed or rely on generalised assumptions. For instance, the argument that young ones cannot set their life goals because they must continue the family business is stated rather than fully explored. Nevertheless, the main arguments regarding stronger relationships, pooled skills, and zero investment are relevant and well-contrasted with the drawbacks, such as restricted career choices.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The essay has a coherent overall arrangement and a clear progression through an introduction, body paragraphs for disadvantages and advantages, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty, as seen in phrases like 'To commence with pointing out the negative' and 'Apart froom these, they can enjoy work'. Reference words are occasionally unclear or repetitive, and cohesive devices are somewhat heavy-handed, which prevents the essay from reaching a higher band.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'undesireable effect', 'demerits', and 'marketing stratergy'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, including 'forefather business' instead of 'family business', 'young onces' instead of 'young ones', and 'completeting'. Collocations are occasionally awkward, such as 'take less stress'. While these errors do not impede communication, they reflect limitations in precision and flexibility.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating subordinating clauses such as 'although this idea comprises some undesireable effect' and 'when family members work together'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('majority of people', 'run grocery store'), incorrect verb forms ('someone father run'), punctuation slips, and fragment-like structures in the conclusion. These errors sometimes cause difficulty for the reader, aligning the grammar with a Band 5.5 profile.
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