Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic:
In many countries, family members work together in their family business.
Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In many nations, there are many family businesses are running and making a lot of money by whole family members working together. I believe this is very positive development and have numorious benefits of doing family business. This essay will discuss how family businesses are more advantagies. My inclination will be elucidated in the futher paragraphs.
There are lots of family businesses are building day by day and it is really beneficial for them. first abd foremost, running family business helps to decrease stress and workload. Family made this easier to share tasks and grow their business by supporting team. Another advantage is that, trust is the main key, in this case, poeple don't have to worry about any kind of cheat. Where all family members are working together, there are no chance to cheat. For example, recently, one of my friend open her own backery, and her mother, father and elder brother are also work there, just a few months before it started and now it is famous shop of the area.
Aditionally, If any business have face the loss, other family members are there to support them in any condition wheather emotionally and physically. Furthermore, while working in family businees, family shares a stong bond day by day and they can find new way and apply it in the business. This smal efforts can make a huge difference later in life. For instance, My own family business, where my father and my uncle are working together, few years back, they had sarted a clothing shop, both put lot of efforts and burned the mid night oil to succed in this. As a result, shop have 10+ workers and making a big shop. This happeds with unbreakable trust, strong bond, patience, and family support.
On the other hand, there are several disagvatages, first, if family business make a loss some time, whole family have to face difficulties. they have to survive and find the way to over come that situation. Secondly, there are chances to break leadership or partenership between family members.
To Conclude, I strongly believe that working with family members and running a sucessfull business is advantages for them as it decrease stress, workload and build a strong relations betwee family members..
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages, taking a clear position that advantages outweigh disadvantages. Main ideas are presented, such as reduced stress, trust, and emotional support, and examples are provided, such as the friend's bakery and the student's own family clothing shop. However, some ideas are somewhat repetitively expressed, and the exploration of disadvantages is brief and slightly underdeveloped compared to the advantages section. Overall, all parts of the task are addressed, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The essay has a recognizable overall structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is utilized, though paragraph boundaries and internal links could be managed more effectively. Cohesive devices are used, but sometimes mechanically or awkwardly, such as 'first abd foremost', 'Aditionally', and 'To Conclude'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and logical progression between sentences can feel disjointed. Overall, the organizational structure fits the Band 6 descriptor well.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common collocations like 'burned the mid night oil' and 'unbreakable trust'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice inaccuracies throughout the text, such as 'numorious', 'advantagies', 'futher', 'backery', 'disagvatages', 'sarted', 'happeds', and 'sucessfull'. These errors do not completely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, articles, and punctuation throughout the text, for example: 'there are many family businesses are running', 'this is very positive development and have', 'poeple don't have to worry', 'shop have 10+ workers', and missing capitalization at the start of sentences or after full stops. These recurring errors frequently cause strain for the reader, aligning the grammar with Band 5.0.
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