Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Take a part into family business increased productivity and opportunity as well as taking a resposibility to reached home business to another level is quite challengable however working with family members with share an important ideas with each other enhance scalability of understanding the praticular business. I believe that step into the family business after certain age is a positive approach for everyone.

Nowadays, in many countries mostly people are intrested to grow their family business while considering different technologies and workable ideas. For example, if any elderly couple running their business from long time with their traditional habits however they want be able to beath today's fast paced market therefore if any of their educated family member step in and lead whole business smartly with market needs, and with few latest technology will help to grow their productivity at ork quickly. Consequently, they will get a more opportunities to explore market and expand their surrouding networks.

Another positive point is that working together with all family member gives numerous benefits such as, it helps to save few money for additional men power. For instance, if any couple running a small cafe buisness in thei hometown and after some time they give essential training to their child for that work with that they might be able to save few money on labour cost and also they can get an extra support in busy hours. As a result, the chances will be increase to expand their work in another places with work hardwork and trust under the one roof.

In conclusion, considering all points I believe that working with all family family memeber for one business is beneficial for work and relation both. Therefore those families can suceseed quickly compare to others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you believe family businesses are beneficial, and you give two relevant reasons—newer family members can introduce technology and business knowledge, while relatives can provide extra help and reduce labour costs. The examples of an older couple modernising a business and a family café make the discussion relevant. However, the response focuses almost entirely on advantages, so the question’s comparison with disadvantages is not fully explored. Some points also need fuller explanation: for example, the claim that family businesses improve relationships is introduced only in the conclusion, and the benefits of trust or shared decision-making are not developed. Briefly acknowledge a possible drawback, such as family disagreements, and explain why the advantages still outweigh it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate advantages, and a conclusion. The examples generally follow the points they are intended to support, and linking expressions such as “For example,” “Consequently,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. At times, however, cohesion feels mechanical, and some links between ideas are unclear. In the first body paragraph, the long sentence beginning “For example, if any elderly couple…” contains several connected points without a clear break. The conclusion also repeats “family” and introduces relationships without prior development. Use shorter, more clearly organised sentences and make each paragraph’s main point explicit before adding its example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to business, including “productivity,” “market,” “expand,” “labour cost,” and “training,” which helps communicate the main ideas. There is also some effort to use less common expressions, such as “fast paced market” and “surrounding networks.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow, as in “resposibility,” “praticular,” “beath,” and “suceseed.” Several phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “take a part into family business” and “save few money for additional men power.” Build accuracy by learning common business collocations and checking spelling and word forms. Prefer precise phrases such as “join the family business” and “reduce labour costs.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with subordinate clauses, including the example beginning “if any elderly couple running their business…” This shows an effort to explain causes and results, but the longer structures are often difficult to control. Some sentences lack a complete or correctly formed clause: “if any elderly couple running their business” needs a finite verb, while “the chances will be increase” has an incorrect verb form. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and plurals, as in “all family member” and “a more opportunities.” These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Practise building complex sentences around a clear subject and verb, and check verb forms and singular/plural agreement before adding further clauses.

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