Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Yes many countries family member work together in family business. Because this is family friends and relative the business 100% grow up. My family friend run the company with relative. The company growth up and the generate the profit. All the workers very happy and company at stable. All the family very happy and name this company ADEEL GROUP.

Family business Advantage and disadvantage. Family business member one of the main advantage of a family is build a trust. Because they can share the ideas and make decisions can quickly and support each other difficult times. Make stock price deicide can easily. The company run easily no more arguments my opinion Family business is the best. Disadvantage AT the end company is the divided. The company divided in the family member the reasons is all the company member is the separate with the family. The company is going on loss and no run and the company is the dead. My opinion family business not perfect at the end dead.

MY opinion is family business is the best . My experience and knowledge about this family member business. You can share all the problem business member and make the decisions everything easily. About this project and the next project each and everything full supported. You can Build the company top up, this is my opinion. Family member Business Best.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear overall opinion that family businesses are beneficial, and you mention relevant advantages such as trust, sharing ideas, quick decisions and mutual support. The example of your family friend’s company also connects to the topic. However, the discussion is very brief and the ideas are not sufficiently explained: for instance, you say the workers are happy and the company is stable without showing why working with relatives produces these outcomes. The disadvantage about a business being divided among family members is relevant, but its cause and consequences remain unclear. The response also does not meet the required minimum length, which limits how fully you can develop both sides. Add specific explanations and examples, then state more clearly why the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: you introduce the topic, discuss advantages and disadvantages, and finish by restating your opinion. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, progression between ideas is difficult to follow, and several points are repeated, especially that family businesses are “the best” and that decisions are easy. Connections such as “Because” and “At the end” are sometimes used without making the relationship between ideas clear. The paragraphing also does not consistently separate the main points, and some sentences appear as fragments or abrupt statements. Use one paragraph for each main idea, begin with a clear topic sentence, and connect each explanation to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “trust,” “decisions,” “support,” “profit,” and “disadvantage,” so the general subject is identifiable. However, the vocabulary range is basic and highly repetitive, with “company,” “family,” and “business” appearing frequently. Several inaccurate word choices or combinations make the meaning hard to understand, such as “the company growth up,” “make stock price deicide,” and “the company is the dead.” Aim for more precise expressions and check that words fit together naturally. For example, you could describe a business as “grow,” “remain stable,” or “suffer losses,” depending on the intended meaning. A wider range of accurate terms would help you explain the advantages and risks more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, with limited evidence of varied sentence structures. Frequent errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For example, “family member work together” needs a plural subject and verb, while “The company growth up” does not use a correct verb form. In “all the workers very happy,” the sentence is missing a verb, and several ideas run together without clear punctuation. There are attempts to link clauses with “because,” but these are not consistently formed as complete sentences. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then combine related ideas using conjunctions and check articles, plurals and full stops.

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