Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic:
In many countries, family members work together in their family business.
Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Many people believe that it is best thing to make profits and operate a business, if family members work together the advantages are outweigh the disadvantages
The main reason to become a part of the family business is that it helps to become independent and allow people to take decisions by themselves which helps to enhance their decision making and critical thinking skills. furthermore, family oriented business provide them freedom to work as they want rather than following the 9 to 5 strict timing of workplace.
For example, In countries like India, the small scale venders close many deals with other country markets with their sharp decision making skills which help them to make profits.
Secondly, they get appreciation and credit of work which they perform. these small things makes very difference as these appreciations motivate them to open more opportunities for themselves. For example, many people prefer to handle their family business than doing a co-operate job because in private sector employees do not get credits for their work which become one of the reason of their demotivation.
On the other hand, family business has some disadvantages which cannot be avoided. The business operate by all the members of the family which sometimes leads to relationships conflicts. People might think that they are investing more in the business than other family members but they have to divide the profits equally which cause the conflicts. These can be solved by assigning equal roles to all the family members.
In conclusion, family oriented business has many positive outcomes which helps an individual to improves their professional skills such as decision-making, critical thinking and leadership. And the conflicts can be solved by adapting the equal role strategies.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
Your position is clear: you believe family businesses have more advantages, and you address both benefits and drawbacks. The points about independence, flexible working, recognition, and family conflict are relevant to the question. You also support them with examples, including the reference to small businesses in India. However, some ideas are more fully explained than others. The discussion of independence and decision-making is linked to skills, while the claim that family members receive more appreciation is asserted rather than clearly demonstrated. The India example is also broad and does not explain how it illustrates family members working together. Develop each example with a specific situation and explain how it supports your view; this would make the response more complete and persuasive.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it introduces your view, presents advantages in two paragraphs, considers a disadvantage, and ends with a conclusion. Signposts such as “Secondly,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow this structure. However, some connections are mechanical, and the relationship between ideas is not always clear. For instance, the sentence about equal profit-sharing introduces a possible source of conflict, but “These can be solved by assigning equal roles” does not clearly explain how role allocation resolves disagreement over investment or profits. Some sentences also begin abruptly with “furthermore” or “these,” and the final sentence starts with “And.” Use clearer referencing and connect each proposed solution directly to the problem it addresses.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “decision making,” “critical thinking,” “profits,” “appreciation,” and “conflicts.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and you attempt some more specific expressions such as “family oriented business.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “close many deals,” “get appreciation and credit of work,” and “open more opportunities.” There are also spelling or form issues such as “venders” and “co-operate.” These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce precision and naturalness. Build accuracy by learning common word partnerships and checking spelling; for example, use “secure deals,” “receive recognition for their work,” and “create further opportunities.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “which,” “because,” and “but,” and most of your meaning remains understandable. Some errors occur in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries. For example, “the advantages are outweigh” has an incorrect verb construction, while “family oriented business provide” needs a plural or singular form used consistently. In “these small things makes very difference,” the subject–verb agreement and article are incorrect. The opening sentence also joins ideas without clear punctuation, and the conclusion begins a sentence with “And.” Review agreement and article use, and punctuate longer sentences carefully. More accurate control of these patterns would make your varied sentence structures easier to read.
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