Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this present era, Family business is seen as legacy which is passed by first generation to second generation nowadays its been seen in different nations that all family members work together to run this business. I agree with the statment that it has more benifits then loss which i would like to discuss in my upcoming paragraphs.

To begin with, in this modern time its very hard to get job which provide as all the things from top to bottom, in other words in this expencive day today's life one job salary is not enough full fill whole family's need; also one person can work and other will got three meals is also difficult. So in many countries individuls run family business in which they can work together and also make some money and fullfill there desire and there sucess ratio is also high. For an example, there is a survey done by "Economic Times" in 2019 in Africa and the say that aroud 70 percent people who run family business is sucefuul that doing corporate job.

Secondly, there is a history proff that business which pass by grand parents to native it has a good will in markect so it is easy to run and only thing is to grow that business. To examplify, Reliance industrie in India which is built by Dhirubhai Ambani and now it runs by therir grand son's and after decade by decade they improve and make it global chain.

On flip side, if the country dosent have markect and there people dont want to take risk and work by themself or in corporate that Job is better option. Likely in Usa more than 81 percent people do corporate job as per articel in Ohio book.

To conclude, I firmly believe that Family business is better option than job in many countriesand also it depend upon the personal choise and intrest as everyone has different taste.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You answer the question directly, stating that family businesses have more benefits than drawbacks, and you give relevant reasons: relatives can contribute to the household income, and an established business may benefit from its history and reputation. The Reliance example helps illustrate how a business can continue across generations. However, the first reason is not always clearly connected to why working as a family is advantageous, and the claims about success rates and corporate employment are presented without enough explanation. The opposing view is also brief and does not fully explore a disadvantage of family businesses. Develop each main point with a clearer explanation and a specific, credible example to make your position more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two supporting paragraphs, a counterpoint, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “To begin with,” “Secondly,” and “On flip side” help readers follow the broad progression. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from difficulty finding a job to family income and then to a success-rate claim without showing how each idea supports the main point. The counterargument is also not clearly linked back to the question. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s central claim, then develop it in a logical sequence; make references such as “this business” and “that Job” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “legacy,” “corporate job,” “good will,” and “global chain,” and you attempt to express ideas about inheritance, reputation, and business growth. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes meaning less clear. Phrases such as “provide as all the things from top to bottom,” “fullfill there desire,” and “history proff” do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors, including “statment,” “benifits,” and “sucefuul,” are also noticeable. Build a more accurate set of business-related expressions and check spelling and word forms carefully; the suggestions below offer useful replacements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, using connectors such as “in other words” and “which” to add information. The main ideas are generally understandable, but some grammatical errors make sentences difficult to follow. For example, “one job salary is not enough full fill whole family's need” has problems with articles, possessives, and sentence structure, while “the say that aroud 70 percent people … is sucefuul” has unclear subject–verb agreement and clause construction. There are also inconsistent capitalisation and punctuation choices. Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add subordinate clauses only when their relationships are clear. Review articles, plural forms, agreement, and punctuation when editing.

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