Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic:

In many countries, family members work together in their family business.

Do you think family businesses have more advantages than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the modern era, work together on a family memebers is better. nowadays people like a work together a family memebers, because this work very easy and quickly.I vehently believed that superiority overshadow the staggering downsides. I will discuss the advantage and disadvantage.

Examining the brigher side, If people do the work together on family quit a many benefit and advantage on business. This work with relationship very close and freindly. Rather than work a together save a time and money. family members do the work together see the childern and learn a relationship and teach the other skills. morever together the work on many benefit and saving a money and do the together strong a relationship.

To add more into it, If people do the work together relation a down because work on many benefit and loss. Rather than relations on very bad effect. some people not prefer a work together because work a many loss. and effect on childern and learn a family effect. family business many effect on relation and new gentration. when business the loss family member together the fighting and many bad effect on childern.

On the contrary, I would not overlooked the disadvantage. firstly, work a together many benefit and many advantages I think doing the work together because save the money and time and relations a strong.

To conclude after pondering over deal of delibertion and thoughts. people mostly like a famliy businesses doing the many benefit and people should a work together because relationship very strong and good.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that family businesses have more advantages, especially in the opening claim that their superiority outweighs the downsides and in the conclusion that they can strengthen relationships. You also attempt to discuss both benefits and drawbacks, including saving time and money and the possibility of family conflict. However, the response only partially develops the task: the advantages are repeated rather than explained with specific examples, and the disadvantages are difficult to distinguish from the benefits in places. For instance, the paragraph about relationships shifts between saying they become stronger and saying they are harmed without explaining when or why. Develop each main point with a clear explanation or relevant example, and keep your position consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, so there is an attempt to organise the discussion. However, ideas do not progress clearly within or between paragraphs. The second paragraph repeats that working together brings benefits, while the next paragraph moves between family relationships, children and business losses without a clear sequence. Connectors such as “To add more into it” and “On the contrary” do not reliably show the relationship between the ideas that follow; the latter introduces another statement in favour of family businesses rather than a contrasting point. Use one paragraph for advantages and one for disadvantages, arrange each point logically, and use linking expressions only when they accurately signal the connection.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “family business,” “advantages,” “disadvantage,” “relationship” and “generation,” and phrases such as “save the money and time” show an effort to express relevant ideas. However, the range is limited and many words or phrases are repeated, while spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “memebers,” “brigher,” “freindly” and “gentration,” as well as unclear expressions such as “work a together” and “relation a down.” Build a more accurate set of phrases for describing benefits and risks, and check spelling and collocations. More precise wording would help distinguish ideas such as cooperation, shared costs and family conflict.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, including a conditional structure beginning “If people do the work together,” but control of sentence formation is weak. Errors are frequent and can make relationships between ideas hard to understand. For example, “this work very easy and quickly” lacks a clear verb structure, and “family members do the work together see the childern” combines clauses without the necessary grammatical links. Articles, agreement and plural forms are also often inaccurate, as in “the advantage and disadvantage” and “family members together the fighting.” Practise building complete simple sentences first, with a clear subject and verb, then join related ideas using accurate conjunctions. Check verb forms, articles and punctuation when editing.

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