Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays people buy many products for skin care but people doesn't really care about their diet and health at all and pays up huge amounts for their treaments to look younger but i strongly believes that people should look on there health first because organs should be good from inside, only then a glowing skin can be possible.

On one hand, people are paying up huge amount to look good or to look younger which is totally a bad thing and i would not recommend them to go after treatments to look younger because in long run it will harm and there are always side effects of any kind of treatment.

On the other hand, people are buying many products to look younger like they are paying huge amount for skin care products which is not bad but not 100 percent good moreover these products does work but if someone stops using these products then it looks much worsen.

So, in conclusion, I strongly suggest that people should join gym and do some workout on regular basis. Moreover, it will help them in long run and make them look younger even in their 50s.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that relying on treatments is a bad idea and that exercise and health are preferable. You also mention both treatments and skincare products, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is only partial: the reasons are brief, and claims such as treatments causing harm or products looking worse when stopped are not explained or supported with a specific example. The conclusion introduces exercise, but this recommendation is not developed in the main paragraphs. The response also contains 194 words, below the required 250, which limits how fully you can explain your position. Develop each reason with explanation or an example, and make your position on products as well as treatments explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, two body paragraphs signposted by “On one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. These markers help the reader identify the broad stages of your argument. However, progression within the paragraphs is limited: several claims are placed together without showing clearly how one supports the next, and the contrast between treatments and skincare products is not fully clarified. Linking phrases such as “moreover” are used, but they do not always create a clear logical connection. The conclusion’s recommendation to join a gym also arrives without a developed link to the earlier discussion. Organise each paragraph around one main reason and explain it before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “skin care,” “side effects,” “treatments,” and “workout,” and the reader can generally understand your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive, particularly “look younger” and “huge amount.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “paying up huge amount,” “look much worsen,” and “organs should be good from inside.” There are also spelling errors, including “treaments” and “there” where you mean “their.” Aim for more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling and natural word combinations; this will make your argument clearer and less repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example in the opening sentence and the sentence beginning “On the other hand,” but these structures are often faulty. Errors in agreement include “people doesn’t,” “people … pays,” “I strongly believes,” and “these products does work.” There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “in long run” and the comma splice in “organs should be good from inside, only then a glowing skin can be possible.” Most sentences rely on simple patterns, so the range is limited as well as inaccurate. Practise subject–verb agreement and build longer sentences with clear clause boundaries, checking each sentence for a complete and correctly punctuated structure.

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