Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays,products business is very famous in world wide.It is very good for everyone for live life.People have many products business like skin care products,hair products and other products.In modren era many people used the products in daily life beacuse they want to look like younger.It is a good thing. But some people says it is not good for human body.

To begin with, many products is very helpful for people.It is a good thing because they can help to people for treatments to look younger.Firstly it is very easy to buy.Many people buy some produst on social media.this is very for people. they can purchase products like skin products some discounts.Many sites giving a best off to everyone.Secondly it is a good business to help economically good. When many people purchase products for look like a younger.These products are very helpful for man and women.They are help to women to look like beautiful and men look like a smart.

On the other hand, these products some time not good.Some people think that is very fake and in these products used very low quality metirial.That is danger for everyon.Beacuse low quality products is very harmful for human body.For example many people buy the product to see the fake online adds.there are not good for people.Some people sale low quality products in less rate . Many people believe online adds and they are buy products online.

In conculsion, many people buy products for good treatments for hair and skin care.they have many site to purchase products.Other people think it is not good for people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall opinion in the introduction—“It is a good thing”—and include a counterpoint about low-quality products, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion only partly develops whether the trend is good or bad. The benefits are mostly asserted, such as saying products are “very helpful” and that the business is economically beneficial, without explaining these claims or giving a specific example. The opposing view focuses on fake online advertisements and harmful ingredients, but its consequences are also not explored in detail. The conclusion repeats both sides rather than firmly restating your judgement. Develop two or three reasons with explanation and a concrete example, and make your final position consistent and explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting the trend, a paragraph presenting disadvantages, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “To begin with,” “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “On the other hand” help readers identify the intended direction. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several points are repeated rather than connected or developed—for example, the benefits of buying products and looking younger recur without adding a new explanation. Some links are unclear, as in “this is very for people,” and the conclusion introduces little synthesis. Use each paragraph to develop a distinct main idea, then connect the reason to its effect with clear referencing and linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “skin care products,” “treatments,” “low quality,” and “harmful,” so the reader can generally identify the subject and your main points. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “products,” “people,” and “good.” There are also frequent spelling and word-choice problems, such as “modren,” “metirial,” “adds” for advertisements, and “less rate” for a low price. Some combinations are difficult to understand, including “economically good” and “look like a younger.” Build a more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling and natural word partnerships; this will make your ideas clearer and less repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, and the basic meaning is often understandable. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and attempts to combine ideas frequently contain errors. Examples include “many products is,” “many people used the products,” and “they are buy products online,” which show problems with agreement and verb forms. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “a best off” and “they can purchase products … Many sites giving.” These errors occur often enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple sentence patterns first, especially subject–verb agreement and present-tense forms, then join related ideas using correctly formed clauses and consistent punctuation.

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