Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modern era, People like to invest in skincare products and surgeries which make them look more younger and beautifull. However, this essay will discuss both positive and negative effects with my opinion in further paragraphs.

On the positive side, One of the main reason is buying products for skin care is beneficial for glowy skin instead of puting huge money in skin treatments. Nowadys, most of the people like to use korean skincare pdocuts also which is at vogue and this helps people's skin from various skin issues for example, acne, blemishes, dry and oily skin skin.

On the other side, paying for treaments has it's own drawbacks. First and foremost is, It is very expensive and many people cannot afford it. Secondly, later in the life it starts showing skin and health problems which can be a life danger. No doubt, it makes people young but it does not suit all people. For example, Few years back, one bollywood actor in india died in early age as she performed many treatments on body and skin which ened her life.

In my opinion, I personally believe that investing in many products and treatments should taken in limit like if individuals should be aware for it's effects rather than alluring other peopleto look younger.

In conclusion, This essay discussed both pros and cons with my opnion. Both sides has it's own reasons. Although, Investing in products more safer than expensive treatments to look younger.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the question by discussing benefits and drawbacks and giving a personal view: you favour using products and treatments in moderation, while concluding that products are safer than expensive treatments. However, the position is not fully consistent or clearly developed. The opening promises to discuss both effects, but the positive paragraph focuses mainly on skincare products and does not explain the benefits of treatments; the negative paragraph makes broad claims about health risks without explaining how common or supported they are. The example of an actor is relevant in principle, but it is vague and does not establish that treatments caused her death. The response is also five words below the required minimum. Develop each main point with clearer reasoning and a more specific, reliable example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, a personal opinion, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the positive side,” “On the other side,” and “In conclusion” make the direction easy to follow. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some of the stronger control associated with the next level. However, the linking is somewhat formulaic, and the opinion paragraph and conclusion repeat similar points rather than advancing the argument. Some connections are also unclear, particularly the shift from affordable skincare products to the claim that treatments can cause serious health problems. Use fewer stock transitions and make the relationship between each claim, explanation, and example explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “skincare products,” “treatments,” “acne,” “blemishes,” and “afford,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. There are also attempts at more specific expressions such as “skin issues” and “health problems.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “beautifull,” “pdocuts,” “treaments,” and “opnion.” Some combinations are unnatural, such as “glowy skin,” “at vogue,” and “a life danger.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise language for discussing risks and benefits would help you express your ideas without relying on broad or repeated terms such as “problems” and “people.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple sentences and longer structures, including a contrast introduced by “Although” and a relative clause in “products and surgeries which make them look…”. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. Examples include “One of the main reason is buying products…,” “instead of puting,” “it does not suit all people,” and “should taken in limit.” There are also problems with agreement and sentence construction, as in “Both sides has it’s own reasons,” and the final “Although” clause is left without a complete main clause. Practise building accurate sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check agreement, verb forms, articles, and punctuation before submitting.

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