Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

these days is easier for people to purchase much products or buy treatments that help them look young. i agree because these products can remove any bad mark in people body.

firstly, removing of mark from the body.there are mark that has disfigure alot of people face andd their body. with these products of creat that has being manufacture the mark in the face or any part of the body can be rmove when these product are use regularly. for instance, there are people that have birth mark and stresh mark in their body with these product those mark can be remove when the cream are apply.

on the other hand, these product can also treat the infetion in the skin. when these product are apply regularly it can cure any infection and fungal in the skin if properly use always. the product can make old people to look younger and mk their skin to be shining. one thing about the products is that they have no side effect.and the products is easy to purchase in store and in the market and the products are not cost in the store. for example skin infection that has being in the body for a long time can be cure if these product are apply , mr james that have skin infection after he apply the produts the skin infection was remove.

in conclusion, i agree because these products are help to remove bad mark from the body and maintain the skin and they are easy to buy in the market place.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear opinion that these products are beneficial, and you offer relevant reasons: removing marks and treating skin problems. The examples of birthmarks, stretch marks, and Mr James help illustrate your points. However, the response addresses the question only partially because it focuses mainly on skin treatments and does not explore the wider issue of products or treatments used specifically to look younger. Several claims, such as products having “no side effect,” are asserted without explanation or qualification. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation of how it improves people’s lives, and acknowledge a possible drawback or explain why the benefits outweigh it. This would make your position and supporting ideas more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “firstly” and “on the other hand,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through your ideas. However, the progression is not always clear: both body paragraphs largely discuss skin marks or infections, and the second paragraph shifts between treatment, appearance, safety, price, and an example without clear links. Some connections are repetitive or awkward, such as repeated use of “these products” and the long sequence beginning “one thing about the products.” Group related points together, use pronouns or precise references where clear, and make each paragraph develop one main reason. This would improve the flow and reduce the mechanical feel of the linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “birth mark,” “stretch mark,” “skin infection,” and “fungal,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is limited and repeated, especially “product,” “body,” “skin,” and “remove.” Several word choices, forms, and spellings make parts difficult to interpret, for example “bad mark,” “disfigure,” “creat,” “infetion,” and “shining.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “the products are not cost in the store.” Aim for more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations. For example, distinguish between “blemishes,” “scars,” and “skin conditions,” and describe a product as “affordable” rather than saying it is “not cost.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences using clauses such as “when these products are apply regularly,” and you use basic sentence patterns to express reasons and examples. However, the range is limited, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently enough to make reading difficult in places. Examples include “these products are help,” “the cream are apply,” and “the products is easy to purchase.” Several sentences run together or are separated incorrectly, as in “there are mark that has disfigure alot of people face andd their body.” Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement and use consistent verb forms, such as “the cream is applied” and “these products help.”

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