Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There are many people lately who use products or treatments that help them take care of their body to look younger, while some people believe that this a good thing to be done for different reasons, others think that we shouldn't pay money for this kind of treatments.

One of the main reasons why peope think that such products are important to use, is that it helps them to stay active in the society without fearing the looks of others when it comes to the age, and that's related to certain activities and situations that usually we stop doing it at an older age, we can also add that by using skin care products you prevent certain diseases but also you keep looking energetic, which consider to be a positive feature in the daily life routines. A good illustration for this is when a women wants to keep the same statut at the job or in her surroundings she tries these products, and usually she receive complimants that encourage her to keep looking in a certain way. Even though these products may seems to be used for her well-being, the majority of people goes through this because of a psychological pressure imposse by the society that manipulate their decision making.

While when speaking about treatments that makes people look good seems a good thing, but if we look deep into it many negative aspects poops up, first the cost of these treatements are usually very expensive and probably if we spend it in a good nutrition program it gaves same results, this shows its limited impact when people can't afford that with time, we can also mention the source of the matters this product created from are probably not healthy or it hurt the enivronment and affects directly or inderectly climat change. But the biggest red flag for me is that the people who buy it are manipulated by both the big companies who produce such treatments and also the society who make them think that they should be looking younger rather than looking natural and normal, which a lot of people prefer. An example of this situation is that a worker can spend a good amount of his payment for this reason each month, and if he uses this money on healthy food, workout and travel will get a better look from outside and inside.

To conclude, I think that these products should be use for specific cases such as who have a mark on his skin or to heal a disease that should be take care of, and rather work on his mentality more to strenghten his character to not get manipulated easily and to understand himself clearer, because these products at a certain age they won't be effective as before.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both sides of the question and make your position clear: you recognise possible benefits, such as confidence and skin care, but ultimately argue that appearance-focused products and treatments are often harmful because of cost and social pressure. The examples about a woman’s workplace and a worker’s spending help connect the discussion to everyday life. This meets the task well, while some points are less fully explained than others. For instance, the claim that skin-care products prevent diseases is not supported or distinguished from cosmetic treatments, and the environmental concern is introduced without explaining its impact. To strengthen the response further, develop these points with clearer reasoning and make the distinction between ordinary products and medical treatments more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting considerations, and a conclusion that restates your view. The progression from possible benefits to drawbacks is easy to follow, and phrases such as “One of the main reasons” and “To conclude” signal the stages of the argument. However, some sentences contain several ideas joined together, making the relationships between them less clear. The second body paragraph begins “While when speaking…” and then shifts through cost, nutrition, environmental effects, and social pressure without clear separation. Use shorter sentences and organise each paragraph around one main point. Also make references such as “this product” and “it” more explicit so readers can readily identify what they refer to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “psychological pressure,” “decision making,” “limited impact,” and “manipulated,” which helps express your concerns about social expectations and consumer choices. There is also some variety in how you describe appearance and treatments. However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “statut” appears to mean status, “poops up” is unsuitable for this context, and “the source of the matters this product created from” is difficult to interpret. Several words are also misspelled, including “complimants” and “enivronment.” Aim for precise, natural combinations and check spelling; for example, describe treatments as “made from potentially harmful ingredients” rather than using an unclear phrase.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “while,” “because,” and “when,” and you use these to express contrast and reasons. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction can make parts difficult to follow. For example, “this a good thing” needs a verb, “the majority of people goes” has a subject–verb agreement problem, and “these products should be use” has an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “A good illustration for this is when…” also becomes difficult to control as more clauses are added. Practise building accurate shorter sentences first, then combine them using subordinate clauses. Check agreement and verb forms during revision.

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