Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

nowadays people are buying cosmetics prodcut for there beauty . I think it has both negative and positive point

in positive point people are managing themself for look attractive it imporves confidence in them and they feel confident when they look good .

there are many products for skin hair and nails ,and it also helps in businesses like saloon and dermatologist. They extend their business

and it has some negative points like sometimes people uses a lot of products in their daily life so sometimes the product may react negative like skin diseases and plastic surgery

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You give a relevant response by identifying both positive and negative effects, and your view that the issue has “both negative and positive” points is understandable. You also mention confidence, businesses such as salons and dermatologists, and possible skin problems from product use. However, the task asks whether this is a good or bad thing, and your position is not developed into a clear overall judgement. The ideas are very brief: for example, you do not explain how looking younger affects people’s lives or give a specific example, and “plastic surgery” is mentioned without explaining its drawback. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words. Develop a clear position and support each main reason with explanation and an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response by moving from positive effects to negative ones, and phrases such as “in positive point” and “it has some negative points” signal this contrast. The reader can generally follow the main ideas. However, the response is presented as one continuous block, so the positive and negative points are not clearly separated into paragraphs. Connections between ideas are also limited: the sentence about businesses follows the confidence point without explaining their relationship, and the final list of skin diseases and plastic surgery is abrupt. Use separate paragraphs for your position, benefits, drawbacks, and conclusion, and connect each point with clear transitions and explanation.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “cosmetics,” “confidence,” “skin,” “hair,” “nails,” and “plastic surgery,” so the general subject is clear. There are also attempts to express effects, such as products helping people “look attractive.” However, the range is narrow and several choices or forms are inaccurate, including “cosmetics prodcut,” “for there beauty,” “managing themself,” and “react negative.” These errors make some phrases awkward and less precise. Aim for accurate topic-specific expressions such as “anti-ageing products,” “appearance-related treatments,” and “adverse reactions.” Check spelling and word forms carefully, and avoid repeating broad terms such as “products” without specifying what they are.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You communicate several simple ideas, and the sentence beginning “there are many products for skin hair and nails” shows an attempt to join related information. However, sentence structures are mostly simple, with little variety or development. Errors in agreement and sentence formation appear in examples such as “people uses” and “it imporves confidence in them and they feel confident,” while the final sentence joins several ideas without a clear grammatical relationship. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, including the lowercase opening and missing commas. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentence boundaries, then add controlled complex sentences using “because,” “although,” or “which” to explain your reasons.

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