Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is no ambiguity that every one want to look flowless in this era, though, with ageing and some other factors beauty may fade away. To fulfill need of thouse who feel the age is becoming a factor for there dull look, some brands are trying to fill this gap with cosmatic prodouts or surgeries. It is not only expensive but some time life threatning as well.

To commence with, it is very common to see tv comertials regarding anti-ageing products like pills, creams and other cosmatic products. It not only creats a fear of age in mind of old once as it is advertised that being old or having wrinkels will make them less attractive but psycologically manupulate them to buy such expencive goods to temporarily retain there beauty as there effect dont last forever and they need to buy again and again.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under-length at 144 words, failing to meet the 250-word minimum requirement. This severely limits the development of ideas. While the essay introduces the topic and touches upon the negative aspects of anti-ageing products, it fails to provide a balanced discussion or a clear conclusion. The ideas are under-developed, and the lack of length prevents the student from fully addressing all parts of the task. Consequently, the response is only a partial attempt at the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into two paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is limited due to the brevity of the text. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'To commence with' and 'not only... but', but the overall structure is underdeveloped. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical flow is interrupted by the abrupt ending of the text. The paragraphing is present, but the lack of content makes it difficult to assess the full range of cohesive skills.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains frequent spelling errors that are distracting, such as 'flowless' (flawless), 'thouse' (those), 'cosmatic' (cosmetic), 'prodouts' (products), 'comertials' (commercials), 'creats' (creates), 'wrinkels' (wrinkles), 'psycologically' (psychologically), 'manupulate' (manipulate), and 'expencive' (expensive). While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary, the high frequency of spelling mistakes and the limited range of expression prevent the response from reaching a higher band. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey basic meaning but lacks precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'every one want' (wants), 'age is becoming a factor for there dull look' (their), 'some time' (sometimes), 'life threatning' (life-threatening), and 'as there effect dont last' (their/doesn't). Punctuation is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high density of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction significantly impacts the quality of the writing.

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