Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.
Is this a good thing or a bad thing?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Over the years, nowadays, youngster of today's generation are becoming more reliable on their good looks than knowledge. This trend is directly because of the availability of the cosmetic products. In my opinion, This is mainly due to the advancement in medical field and connivant of Import and export businesses which make it easy make products available for customers. However , using the products without having in knowledge of side effects can be become reason to deathly illness.
Considering the good things, first and foremost the expand of businesses meaning, compare to the past, the market of cosmetic product is established in every coroner of the world. As are result, the availability of these skin products is become easier than ever to customers. Additionally, improvement in medical field has played important role as, clinic such as, dermatologist and rhinoplasty
Taking about the advantages, firstly the overall atmosphere turned dangerous in many part of world. This is directly causing the climate and as a result, the heat is become uncontrollable. Which let people to use the skin product to protect themself. Additionally,
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 197 words. Furthermore, the essay is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. While the prompt asks for an opinion on whether the trend of anti-aging products is positive or negative, the response is fragmented and fails to develop a clear, consistent argument. The ideas presented, such as the link between climate change and skin products, are tangential and lack logical connection to the prompt. Due to the significant under-length and the incomplete nature of the response, the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. Paragraphing is attempted but the content within these paragraphs is disjointed and often incoherent. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the abrupt transition in the third paragraph. The lack of a clear introduction, body, and conclusion makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. The text reads more like a collection of disconnected sentences rather than a cohesive argument, which significantly hinders the reader's ability to track the writer's train of thought.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'youngster of today's generation are becoming more reliable on their good looks' (likely meaning 'reliant') and 'connivant of Import and export' (likely meaning 'convenience'). The use of 'deathly illness' is also imprecise in this context. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the frequent errors in collocation and spelling suggest a restricted lexical range that struggles to convey the intended meaning clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'availability of these skin products is become easier'), incorrect word forms (e.g., 'the expand of businesses'), and sentence fragments. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and capitalization errors. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent errors. The lack of control over basic grammar makes the text difficult to read and understand, preventing the use of more complex, error-free structures.
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