Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Over the years, youngsters of today's generation are becoming more reliant on their good looks than knowledge. This trend is directly because of the availability of cosmetic products. In my opinion, this is mainly due to the advancement in the medical field and the of import and export businesses which make it easy to make products available for customers. However, using the products without having knowledge of their side effects can become a deadly illness.

Considering the good things, first and foremost the expansion of businesses means, compared to the past, the market of cosmetic products is established in every corner of the world. As a result, the availability of these skin products is becoming easier than ever to customers. Additionally, improvement in the medical field has played an important role as, alongside imported cosmetic products and clinics such as, dermatologists and rhinoplasty are easily reachable in every city in a country like India. Not to mention, payment of these high-profile doctors is becoming increasingly easy with installment plans where clients do not have to pay the amount at once.

Looking at the negative outcome which people often ignore to accept. Firstly, the dark side of using skin products. Many companies produce these products with harmful ingredient which often leave users with skin diseases. Secondly, people especially women tend to spend more money on products which help them to look good. These expensive products are not being supplied to foreign countries. Due to this, the total amount gets higher than the actual retail price can lead to worsening the financial situations.

In conclusion, overall using the treatment of shaping the face structure or investing in cosmetic products to look in their best shape is appreciable but at a same time, having a sense of urgency is essential to protect themselves from not being victims of a dark side.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of the trend. However, the position is somewhat inconsistent; the introduction suggests a focus on youth reliance on looks, while the body paragraphs shift to the availability of products and medical treatments. The development of ideas is uneven. For instance, the point about 'installment plans' is a specific detail that lacks a clear connection to the broader argument of whether this trend is positive or negative. While the essay covers the main requirements, the analysis of the 'good' and 'bad' sides could be more balanced and better integrated to form a cohesive argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'first and foremost', 'additionally', and 'looking at the negative outcome'. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Looking at the negative outcome which people often ignore to accept'. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear; for example, the phrase 'the dark side' is used without a strong preceding context. Paragraphing is logical, but the internal flow within paragraphs could be improved to ensure that ideas build upon each other more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'high-profile', 'rhinoplasty', and 'appreciable'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'deadly illness' (when referring to skin reactions), 'ignore to accept', and 'at a same time'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of the argument. A wider range of topic-specific vocabulary would help elevate the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'the of import and export businesses', 'availability of these skin products is becoming easier than ever to customers', and 'harmful ingredient' (should be plural). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some awkward phrasings that affect the flow. While the errors are frequent, they rarely prevent the reader from understanding the intended message. To reach a higher band, the writer should focus on subject-verb agreement and more accurate use of articles and plural forms.

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