Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is an undeniable fact that individuals ageing above 35 years have started to use products and have initated to pay for treatments which will make them look younger in age has increased in the recent times. This significantly impacts the health and environment, however others reject this notion. This essay will analyze the impacts of using these products with relevant examples.

On the first hand, the trend of looking younger in age is an influence to the general public which was started on social media by the actors to gain views. The way of promoting these products is just to create the hype and earn profit from the company which manufactures these products. For example, the consumer court of Mumbai did sue the company and the actor which promoted these products on the basis of misrepresentation.

However, applying these products and opting the treatment does affect the health significantly. These products do have chemicals which leads to skin cancer in humans. Although, while manufacturing, the waste also pollutes the environment on a large scale. As a result, many countries have banned these products to keep their population free from harmful dieases like skin cancer and have started to promote to keep the earth free from toxic chemicals.

In conclusion, using these products is never a good idea to look younger because going against the natural process to be old in age will definitely lead to serious health issues. Consumers should give a genuine thought on the immerse side effects of these before using them

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether anti-ageing products and treatments are beneficial or harmful, taking a clear negative stance. The student presents relevant ideas, such as social media influence, marketing hype, health risks like skin cancer, and environmental pollution. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and occasionally repetitive. For instance, the mention of the consumer court in Mumbai is a specific example, but the connection to the overall prompt is slightly underdeveloped. The conclusion clearly restates the writer's position. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, placing it firmly at a Band 6.0 level according to the official descriptors, as the main parts of the prompt are covered with relevant, albeit somewhat under-developed, ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas, such as marketing tactics in the second paragraph and health and environmental impacts in the third. Cohesive devices are employed, including transition markers like 'On the first hand', 'However', and 'In conclusion'. However, some referencing is slightly mechanical or awkward, and phrases like 'On the first hand' reflect unnatural collocation. While logical progression is generally maintained, the occasional clunky transition affects the overall flow. Therefore, this section aligns best with the Band 6 descriptors due to the logical arrangement and attempt at cohesive devices, despite some awkwardness.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'misrepresentation', 'consumer court', and 'immense side effects'. However, there are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations throughout the text, such as 'ageing above 35 years have started to use products and have initated to pay', 'opting the treatment', and 'dieases'. Additionally, spelling errors like 'initated' and 'dieases' detract from precision. While communication is not severely impeded, the frequency of word choice inaccuracies and spelling slips prevents the score from reaching a higher band, making Band 5.5 a fair representation of the student's current lexical control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, incorporating relative clauses and subordinate conjunctions such as 'which will make them look younger' and 'Although, while manufacturing, the waste also pollutes'. However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are several errors in tense consistency, article usage, and prepositions, such as 'in age has increased in the recent times', 'an influence to the general public', and 'give a genuine thought on the immerse side effects'. Punctuation at the end of the essay is also missing a final period. Because these errors occur frequently alongside complex structures without completely blocking communication, the grammar performance meets the criteria for Band 5.5.

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