Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modren era, Looking more and more younger becomes a new craze in people because of that poeple purchase many beauty good or pay for expensive treatment to look younger, In my opinion, has both good effects and bad effects in poeople lifes.

Buying products to looks younger has some advantages for people such as, skin care product help reduce the rinkles and make the skin cells more young which help people more attractive. Moreover, beauty products and treatements help skin healthiness and inhance the personality of person, specialy, Actors getting old or aged these products are like elixers as these product make them younger which helps in there acting carrier.

There are some disadvatages aswell for instace, beauty goods are expensive and very costly process which affetct middle class people, Additionaly, these products and trestments comes with sideeffects which are devestating some time. In Recent time some people complaint about getting skin burns , reaction to skin and other allerigies because of these products.

To Conclude, Although, productsor treatment to look younger has some cons but the pros outweigts the cons as most of the population gets benifts form these products and make themselfs younger.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether spending money on products and treatments to look younger is a good or bad thing, presenting a clear position that it has both positive and negative effects. Ideas are presented regarding benefits such as skin care and career help for actors, alongside drawbacks like high costs and side effects. However, the development of these ideas is limited, leading to a somewhat superficial treatment of the topic. Furthermore, the response falls significantly short of the 250-word minimum requirement, containing only 197 words. This under-length issue prevents the full development required for higher band scores, leading to a penalty under Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into four paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs representing different viewpoints, and a conclusion. There is a basic logical progression from advantages to disadvantages. However, cohesive devices are sometimes faulty, repetitive, or mechanically used, such as 'For instance,' 'Additionaly,' and 'To Conclude, Although.' Referencing is occasionally unclear, and paragraphing could be better managed. Despite these mechanical issues, the overall arrangement allows the reader to follow the main arguments without complete confusion, aligning best with a Band 6 level for cohesion and organisation.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate to the topic, such as 'beauty products,' 'treatments,' 'rinkles' (wrinkles), 'elixers,' and 'sideeffects.' However, there are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'modren' (modern), 'poeople' (people), 'good' (goods), 'treatements' (treatments), 'inhance' (enhance), 'specialy' (specially), 'carrier' (career), 'disadvatages' (disadvantages), 'aswell' (as well), 'affetct' (affect), 'Additionaly' (Additionally), 'trestments' (treatments), 'devestating' (devastating), 'complaint' (complained), 'benifts' (benefits), and 'make themselfs' (themselves). These lexical inaccuracies and spelling mistakes cause noticeable strain for the reader, restricting the score to Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, as seen in conditional or concessive clauses like 'In my opinion, has both good effects and bad effects' and 'Although, productsor treatment to look younger has some cons but the pros outweigts the cons.' However, there are frequent grammatical errors, missing subjects, incorrect verb forms, and punctuation faults (e.g., comma splices like 'In this modren era, Looking more and more younger becomes...'). Errors such as 'Look younger' used as a noun phrase and missing prepositions are common. These persistent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar at a Band 5 level.

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