Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years, individuals are able to purchase things or they able to make a payment for the products that aid them to appeared smaller then actual age. Considering this, I believe that this good thing because of good health, at the same time in context of money it is bad thing. This easy will disscussed both sides inupcoming paragraphs.

To Commnece with, with the view point of considering this good things owing to healthy life.

To elaborate this, a person with who invest to products which help them to stay younger are able to peform different tasks without any fatigue. Moreover, person who have sufficient amount for investing then its good invest on health by taking effective suppliments. For instance, a survey was conducted by WHO ( world health organisation) in 2015, they found that most of the people are aware about their diet. The evidence proves that individuals want to purchase things or products which good of them without considering any amount.

Moving towards the view why this bad, as money is source to purchase anything. And this inflation time for investing any amount need proper consideration otherwise people suffer with crisis. For example, during the period of covid-19 people with good savings not only able to fullfill their basic needs but also able to help others. Therefore, making a smart choice is more important for them.

Overall, I believe that although spending amount on products provides good health, but its drawbacks cannot be neglected as money is important for survival

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing whether products and treatments to look younger are good or bad, presenting a balanced view. A position is stated, mentioning that it is good for health but bad regarding financial aspects. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument about health relies heavily on vague statements rather than deep elaboration, and the example regarding the WHO survey lacks strong integration with the prompt. The conclusion reiterates the stance briefly. Because the ideas are presented but under-developed and lack extended support, this performance aligns most closely with Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay demonstrates some organisation with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is heavily disrupted by repetitive phrasing, awkward transitions, and mechanical cohesive devices such as 'To Commnece with' and 'To elaborate this'. Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs lack internal cohesion and smooth logical flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly with pronouns like 'its' and 'they' referring ambiguously back to nouns. These organisational flaws and the repetitive structure place this response firmly at Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'appeared smaller then actual age', 'this good thing', and 'invest to products'. There are also numerous spelling mistakes like 'disscussed', 'upcoming', 'Commnece', 'suppliments', and 'fullfill'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic of health, youth, and money, noticeable errors and limited lexical range prevent the response from achieving a higher band. This corresponds to a Band 5.0 for lexical resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text displays a very limited range of structures, with frequent grammatical errors that often impede comprehension. Sentences frequently lack essential verbs or have incorrect tense usage, as seen in 'individuals are able to purchase... or they able to make' and 'person who have sufficient amount'. There are missing articles ('in context of money it is bad thing') and awkward phrasing throughout ('this inflation time for investing any amount need proper consideration'). Complex structures are attempted but are generally faulty. Due to the high frequency of basic and complex structural errors, a band score of 4.5 or 5.0 is warranted, with 5.0 reflecting the attempt at complex forms despite heavy errors.

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