Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In Recent years people have to purchase different things to not look older and give a huge amount in the form of treatment to not look older.

One major advantage of that is to enhance an individual's confidence and build newly satisfaction level. In controlled way that is the best thing because it can give you more power in your words So, you can easily talk with people without hesitation. When person get treated to look younger and after the treatment it shows exactly how they imagine that when boost their all-facial expression in controlled way and that do not harm anything to them. People use a lot of things to enhance cheeks So, they can see their pout in a mirror or in selfie camera to click the best photo of their life it can improve their imaging skills.

The bad thing is about to look younger on those people who get too much addicted to look beautiful and younger, but their hormones and genes does not give them because they consult with the skin doctor and doctor suggest them your skin is purely highly sensitive and 100 percent harm you. But people have obsession So, they can own type of treatment without consult and destroy their skin harm their inner cells too.

I have an answer people do not get obsessed from that treatment if they do, they only get harm their skin loses their confidence and value in the society. Do not look younger look best.

For example, best people do not want to look younger or beautiful they only want to do best for themself and for others and do not worry about how society talk about you. They talk because everyone is beautiful and they don't accept because of their own jealous and ego.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of anti-aging products and treatments, taking a clear stance that people should focus on looking their best rather than becoming obsessed with staying young. The ideas are relevant and supported with examples, such as individuals enhancing their confidence or getting harmed by ignoring professional medical advice. However, the development of some ideas lacks clarity and depth, particularly the slightly disjointed arguments regarding facial expressions and societal pressure. The response satisfies the general requirements for Task 2, but the explanation of ideas occasionally feels repetitive and under-developed. Therefore, it fits comfortably into Band 6.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a clear stance, moving from advantages in the second paragraph to disadvantages in the third and fourth paragraphs, concluding with a personal viewpoint and final thoughts. Paragraphing is attempted, but paragraph breaks and internal transitions are sometimes awkward or missing, resulting in abrupt shifts between ideas (e.g., 'I have an answer people do not get obsessed...'). Cohesive devices are basic and repetitive, such as 'One major advantage', 'The bad thing', and 'For example'. Referencing can also be unclear, such as ambiguous pronoun use ('that do not harm anything to them'). Overall, the structural and cohesive weaknesses place this text at a Band 5.5.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate to communicate basic ideas about anti-aging treatments, but the range is limited and repetitive. The writer frequently repeats key phrases like 'not look older' and 'look younger'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as 'newly satisfaction level', 'imaging skills' (intended to mean imaging oneself), and 'skin doctor' instead of dermatologist. Less common vocabulary items are attempted but often lack precision or correct collocation, such as 'hormones and genes does not give them'. Because the errors and limited vocabulary occasionally cause strain for the reader while still conveying the core message, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Examples include 'In Recent years people have to purchase...', 'When person get treated...', 'their hormones and genes does not give them', and 'doctor suggest them your skin is purely highly sensitive'. Run-on sentences and comma splices also occur frequently, such as in 'People use a lot of things to enhance cheeks So, they can see their pout...'. While simple sentences are generally understandable, the high frequency of grammatical mistakes restricts the overall score for this criterion to Band 5.0.

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