Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this contemrary era, most of the individuals spend too much money on skincare products and they also pay for many treatments to look younger and beautiful. There are many good and bad reasons behind this situation which i will discuss in the upcoming parahgraph and provide the relevant examples according to experince.

To begin with, there are many reasons thats why people like to spent too much money on these products. First and foremost reason for that as people love spend on their self care beacause in this way they can build the conifidence and self esteem. To elaborate it, as nowadays each and every person has the knowledge that they should need to take care of themselves so for self care they purchase skin care do the skin care products which give them good apperance. The another reason is that nowadays due to advancement of techonology almost everyone use the internet and people follow their favorite celebrity artist and they want to look exactly like them since this prospective they spend money on these kind of products.

Moreover, sometimes people have to face some problems because of using these products . These products and skin care treaments are often very expensive. To illustrate it, people spend vast range of money on this products specially on the treatments like botox and other kind of skin surgeries which help to prevent the wrinkles on the face. The other problemfor this sometimes people become victim of many disease or they also get bad result of any treatment specially on that time when get the treatment from an unprofessional person . For example, Rakhi sawant is an famous bollywood artist intially she was very beautiful but after treatment she looks weird so it does not importanrt everytime any skin treatment will be successful.

To conclude, as we know that by the help of skin care or treatments we can not only feel confididant but we can also face many problems due to these thins.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of buying products and treatments to look younger, but the ideas remain limited and somewhat under-developed. While you attempt to provide reasons, such as building confidence and facing potential health risks, the development lacks depth. For example, your point about celebrities influencing purchasing decisions is introduced but not fully explained, and the example of the Bollywood artist is only briefly mentioned without robust elaboration. Furthermore, your position is not always entirely clear throughout the response, as the conclusion simply restates both sides without clearly summarising a distinct personal stance on whether this overall trend is a good or a bad thing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement and is divided into appropriate paragraphs with a clear introduction and conclusion. You attempt to use cohesive devices to link your ideas, such as "To begin with," "Moreover," and "To conclude." However, referencing is not always clear, and some cohesive devices are mechanical or slightly repetitive, such as the recurring use of phrases like "There are many reasons thats why" and "The another reason is that." While the progression of ideas is generally understandable, the links between sentences can sometimes feel forced or abrupt, keeping the structural flow at a moderate level.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your lexical range is limited but minimally adequate for the task. You attempt to use some less common vocabulary related to the topic, such as "skincare products," "treatments," and "surgeries," but there are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. For instance, you write "contemrary" instead of contemporary, "parahgraph" instead of paragraph, "apperance" instead of appearance, and "techonology" instead of technology. Collocations are also sometimes unnatural, such as "do the skin care products" and "spend vast range of money," which reflects an emerging rather than a secure grasp of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You demonstrate a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences alongside some attempts at complex forms that are often faulty. There are frequent errors in grammar, articles, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement that can cause difficulty for the reader. Examples include "most of the individuals spend" where the article is unnecessary, "reasons thats why people like to spent" which contains tense and structural errors, and "beacause in this way" with spelling and prepositional issues. Additionally, punctuation errors and run-on structures persist throughout the text, meaning that grammatical control remains restricted.

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