Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Beauty products

Now days people are using many beauty product look younger ,pay for treatments that help them to look younger .

Entaire world is now back of beauty and slim good looking ,peopel are following their favorite actors trends ,dressing style ,hair style makeup products.

According to me it is a bad thing people are wasting money recently one of the moive actress Adidi Agrwal died due to weight loss treatment . So risk of life god has given good personality to looks every one no need to looks slim ,colour ,nice hairstyle ,by eating heakty food it automatically body looks beauty and always food habits helps to beauty of person and healthy life style helps looks people younger and stronger ,good looking.

people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger .Now days beauty saloon shops ,adds by watching the products makes people change their mind set artificial chemical products damge the skin ,body go for natural stop using chemical its not good health try to eat health food seasonal food god has provided varity of food depending on season to product our body and keep fit ,healthy and looks beauty. No need to waste money for such unnecessary things ,products not required .

In conclusion , according to me stop buy products or pay for treatments not help them to look younger ,do daily excersice eat healthy food ,eight hours sleep daily it helps peoples looks younger .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear opinion that the trend is bad, and you offer relevant reasons: treatments may risk health, chemical products may damage skin, and healthy habits can support appearance and wellbeing. The example about an actress’s death is intended to support the risk argument, although it needs clearer explanation and reliable detail. Your response addresses the question, but several points are asserted rather than developed—for example, the claims about natural food and seasonal eating are not explained with specific reasoning. The response is also 26 words below the 250-word minimum; the 24 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each main reason with explanation or a relevant example, and add enough original writing to meet the requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable overall shape: an opening, a paragraph giving reasons, a further paragraph about products, and a conclusion. Your position is repeated in the conclusion, which helps the reader identify your view. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined in long, loosely connected strings, such as the sequence about food, appearance, and a healthy lifestyle. Linking phrases such as “According to me” and “In conclusion” are used, but connections between individual claims are often unclear or repetitive. Organise the body into distinct points, each with an explanation and example, and use clear references and transitions so the reader can see how each sentence supports the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “weight loss treatment,” “artificial chemical products,” “healthy food,” and “lifestyle.” These choices make your general subject clear. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “look younger,” “beauty,” and “products.” There are also frequent spelling and word-choice problems, including “Entaire,” “moive,” “heakty,” and “saloon shops,” which can make the reader pause or infer your meaning. Some combinations are unnatural, such as “back of beauty” and “good personality to looks.” Build a topic vocabulary list and check spelling and collocations; prefer precise expressions such as “appearance-enhancing treatments” and “potential health risks.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and consequences, including a sentence linking healthy eating with appearance and health, but most sentences rely on simple patterns or become incomplete and difficult to parse. For example, “people are using many beauty product look younger” is missing grammatical links, while “No need to waste money for such unnecessary things” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. Errors also occur with articles, plurals, agreement, and verb forms, as in “one of the moive actress … died” and “products not required.” Punctuation and spacing make sentence boundaries unclear. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses using “because,” “although,” or “which.”

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