Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent days, Usage of cosmetic product has increased globally to look more younger then actual age. It is easily accessible to buy such items or to pay for treatments to support their skin look younger. It is a beneficial for most of people, however overuse of this products can be harmful in a longer period of time.

To begin with, people purchasing items or paying for treatment to look younger that is because of growing technology and easy access to products. First and formost reason is technology helps to find out the main cause and different equipments for skin is avaialable in market easily to rule out the cause. Many people also go for treatments for beauty products specially womens who wants to look younger than their age though they go to salon or dermatologist who can assist them. Also, on television commercials and adversitement on application promote their products which can be available on many websites. For example, automative information helps to find out main cause of the wrinkles and they also suggest cosmetic products to reduce this problem to look them younger. As a result, more people buy such products to help them look young.

On the other side, some people does not have full awarness of thie skin type and they order those products to look younger which sometimes affects their skin. Over use or higher dose of this products can be harmful in sensitive skins which may lead to burns or ruins original skin. Besides this, some products are very expensive and it is not garauntee that it will work on them, so they loose their money. For instance, people who have sensitive skin type which affects them though they also need to pay for their treatment, so it become more costly.

In conclusion, purchasing cosmetic goods or paying for treatment to look younger has both positive and negetive thing. Although it is expensive and not suitable for all type of skin, many people like to look younger then actual age due to easy access and advance technology hepls them to find a perfect product for them. Thus, there are more positive things than bad things.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You answer the question directly by judging the trend as mostly beneficial while acknowledging risks, and the conclusion restates this position. Relevant reasons include easier access through technology and the possibility of skin damage or financial loss. However, the positive side is developed more fully than the negative side, and some support is unclear: the example about “automative information” does not clearly explain how technology identifies wrinkles or makes a product effective. Develop each reason with a specific, credible example and explain its connection to whether the trend is good or bad. A more balanced discussion of safety, informed choice, or social pressure would also make your evaluation more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting views, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other side,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main direction. However, some links feel mechanical, and the progression within paragraphs is not always clear. The first body paragraph moves from technology to women, advertising, and an example without showing how each point builds the argument. References such as “this problem” and “they” can also be unclear. Group related points together, use more precise referencing, and make the relationship between each example and its main idea explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “treatments,” “sensitive skin,” “wrinkles,” and “dermatologist,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. There are also attempts at more specific language, but inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make meaning less clear. Examples include “automative information,” “rule out the cause,” “adversitement,” and “negetive thing.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “look more younger” and “original skin.” Check spelling carefully and learn common word partnerships for cosmetics and medical treatments. Choosing precise, natural expressions will make your argument clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “although,” “which,” and “so,” and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence construction recur. For example, “some people does not have” should use a plural verb, while “a beneficial” is missing a suitable noun or needs a different structure. In “people purchasing items … that is because,” the sentence construction is incomplete, and “it become more costly” has an incorrect verb form. Practise checking subject–verb agreement and building complete clauses, especially when combining ideas with relative clauses or contrast markers.

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