Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Definitely due to computer age Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.In my opinion it is good also bad depending on some people interest because everything now is choice of preference

it is very bad to indulge in something that is natural to you because because of the type of world we are leaving today they is alot of so many wrong products in our modern market which have side effects to our bodies.

I definitely believe it is very bad to buy products that's make someone to look younger when i believe fully well that one can look absolutely younger if He or She can abstain from alot of things like making sure personal hygiene,keeping fit always, ,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a relevant, though brief, response: you say the practice can be “good also bad,” then focus mainly on the risks of products and treatments, including possible side effects, and suggest hygiene and fitness as alternatives. However, the position remains unclear because you do not explain when or why it is good, and the supporting ideas are not developed with examples. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words: it contains 113 words, and 19 words copied from the prompt were not counted. This leaves the task only minimally addressed. To improve, state a clear overall view, explain both sides if that is your position, and support each main reason with a specific example and explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: you introduce the topic, state a mixed view, and then give reasons for opposing the use of products. However, the ideas do not progress clearly, and the response ends abruptly with “making sure personal hygiene, keeping fit always.” The shift from saying the issue depends on personal preference to arguing that it is “very bad” is not explained. Linking is also limited, with repeated use of “because” and little signposting between points. Use separate paragraphs for your position, reasons, and conclusion, and connect each idea explicitly—for example, explain how side effects support your view before moving to natural ways of maintaining appearance.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main subject, including “treatments,” “side effects,” “personal hygiene,” and “keeping fit.” There is also an attempt to express evaluation through phrases such as “very bad” and “absolutely younger.” However, the range is limited and some word combinations are unnatural or imprecise, which makes parts of the message harder to follow. For example, “computer age” does not clearly introduce the topic, and “the type of world we are leaving today” appears to mean the world we are living in. Aim for more precise collocations and avoid repeating general words such as “things” and “alot.” More accurate topic vocabulary would help you explain your reasons clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentence structures, including “it is good also bad depending on some people interest,” but control is limited and errors frequently affect clarity. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are often missing, as in “look younger.In my opinion,” while the opening fragment, “Definitely due to computer age,” is not a complete sentence. There are also problems with agreement and sentence construction in “they is alot of so many wrong products” and “products that's make someone.” Capitalisation is inconsistent, and the final sentence is left unfinished. Practise writing complete sentences with one main idea each, checking subject–verb agreement and punctuation, then add a few accurately formed complex sentences using “because” or “although.”

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