Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent times, it's possible for individuals to purchase many products or pay skin care treatments that helps them to look younger.

According to my opinion this is both good and bad thing. Firstly, the negative reason is nowadays, in social media people started to advertise products that claims it makes you fair and look younger in fifteen days. Many innocent people unaware about the ingredients and side effects of such products purchase it and face ill effects of it such as acne or skin becoming drier. Another reason famous actor or actress endorsing it makes people believe, it works. Social media is mostly watched by teenagers and young adults, some might be not financial well settled, but after seeing it is endorsed by famous personalities they purchase it from their hard earned money or their parent's money. If the product doesn't delivers what it promised, people feel betrayed and doesn't trust genuine brands too. For example, Adivasi hair oil which was advertised all over social media, tv channels claiming to promote hair growth, people started trusting those advertisements and purchased it, but in the end it did more harm than doing good. Many of them faced severe hairfall issues.

On the another hand there are companies who genuinely makes good products and care for people's health. The ingredients are clearly mentioned, they also take care of environmental problems and cruelty free products. The products are scientifically proven and doesn't claim to make you look younger overnight. For instance, Mamaearth products their ingredients are mentioned in the front packaging and they plant a tree for every purchase made. So this not only helps people look younger but also helps in planting more trees.

In conclusion, it depends on the individual, before making any purchase people has to be aware of the product what all ingredients are used, is it safe to use or not and doesn't believe whatever the social media says.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both sides of the question and give a clear overall position: these products can be beneficial or harmful depending on the product and the buyer’s awareness. The examples of misleading social-media advertising and products with transparent ingredients support your discussion, and the conclusion returns to the need for informed choices. This meets the task well, but the balance and development are uneven. The risks of misleading claims and financial pressure are explained in detail, whereas the benefits are mainly asserted through the Mamaearth example; the claim that it helps people look younger is not clearly demonstrated. To strengthen the response, explain more directly why access to effective treatments is beneficial and qualify the examples with relevant evidence or reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on disadvantages, a contrasting paragraph on benefits, and a conclusion. The progression from misleading advertising to genuine products is easy to follow, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “On the another hand,” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of the argument. However, some linking is mechanical, and the first body paragraph contains several points—product safety, celebrity endorsements, young buyers’ finances, and trust in brands—that could be grouped or connected more explicitly. References such as “it” and “this” are occasionally unclear, particularly in the final paragraph. Use a wider range of natural transitions and make each pronoun’s reference unmistakable to improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “side effects,” “ingredients,” “financial,” “genuine brands,” and “scientifically proven.” These choices allow you to discuss advertising, safety, and consumer trust, and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “hard earned money” and “cruelty free products.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or informal, including “skin care treatments,” “makes you fair,” and “did more harm than doing good.” Repetition of “products,” “people,” and “look younger” also limits flexibility. Aim for more precise phrasing, such as “skincare treatments,” “lighten your skin,” and “caused more harm than benefit,” while checking natural collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If the product doesn’t delivers what it promised” and a relative clause in “products that claims it makes you fair.” The overall meaning remains understandable, and some sentences are controlled, particularly the sentence explaining that ingredients are clearly listed. However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction recur: “treatments that helps,” “people has to be aware,” and “doesn’t believe” should be corrected. There are also awkwardly joined clauses and punctuation issues, for example in the sentence about celebrity endorsements. Review subject–verb agreement and auxiliary verbs, then edit each sentence for a complete, clearly punctuated structure.

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