Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays it's possible for people to buy many products or pay for treatments that help them to look younger.

Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the modren era, everyone wants to look younger. However, it is a matter of debate people should spend money for plastic surgery or buy cosmatic product to look younger. Even though some people opine that it is disadvantages, I believe that it is a benificial for the actor/actoress and old married ladies.

To begin with, the most significant reason why folks spent the colossal amount on their face treatment to look ageless is that face value. Nowadays, who work in the theators or cinema, they want to look like a baby face since they want to continue work in the movies and serials, so they use the plastic surgery on their face and they should apply these treatment for the proffacinal doctor. To illustrate, bollywood actorss named Reka, she had numerous plastic treatment on their face to look younger. In addition, old married ladies use beauti products to hide their age. It published in the "India Times" newspaper is that 75-80% ladies apply make up on their face everyday. Therefore, throgh this make up they look younger than theie real age.

On the other hand, other people contemplate that it is not a proudent idea. Because of the multiple treatment on the face, face tissue may damage and it look terrible. For exmanple, in India, a girl want thick lips, so she apply some chemical on their lips after that this chemical react and huge swelling on the lips then doctor suggest to opprate and cut down the lips. Hence, this notion is not a prudent idea to look younger.

To conclude, although spend money on the treatments and beauti items is not advantages, I believe if someone want to apply that type of treatment, they go to the proffacinal doctor.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that appearance treatments can be beneficial, while acknowledging risks, and you support this with examples involving actors, cosmetics and a lip-treatment complication. This addresses the question, but the discussion is only partly developed: the benefits focus mainly on people whose work depends on appearance and older women, without explaining broader effects or considering why these benefits matter. Your conclusion also shifts toward advice about seeing a professional rather than fully weighing whether the trend is good or bad. Develop each main reason with clearer explanation and make your final judgement directly answer the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs and a conclusion. Signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand” and “To conclude” help readers follow the broad direction. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “Therefore, through this make up they look younger” repeats the preceding point rather than extending it, while “Because of the multiple treatment…” is presented as a sentence fragment after the transition. References such as “this notion” are also vague. Improve progression by linking each example explicitly to the reason it supports and by using clearer references between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-specific vocabulary, including “plastic surgery,” “face treatment,” “chemical” and “swelling,” and use some less common expressions such as “colossal amount” and “ageless.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow: “cosmatic,” “proffacinal,” “proudent” and “beauti” are examples. Several combinations are also unnatural, such as “face value” for the importance of appearance and “apply these treatment.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than ambitious but unsuitable phrases. Proofreading spelling and checking word forms would make your ideas clearer and help you use a wider range more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You try to use both simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “Even though,” “since” and “although.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. For example, “it is a matter of debate people should spend money” needs a linking structure such as “whether people should spend money”; “who work in the theators” has an unclear subject and agreement; and “a girl want… so she apply” has inconsistent subject–verb agreement. Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise building accurate sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking verb agreement and punctuation in each.

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