Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Us the world more impact on high technology, more people are happy and involving in fashion that's make theme happy.

Base on my expression about these situation because of technology and fashiones people. Because for fashion give theme happeness,the also feel comfort.

One thing also that's why they buy more clothes because some branded clothes has limited edition only. More people today's are very fashionable,one thing also more store has ideal giving a discount to attract people.

Secondly for me to reduce these situation companies must limit there production,one thing also may be the will produce expensive clothes. Especially the government much serious on the exportation of clothes because of tha many companies affected.

Lastly base on my own experience and knowledge, for me if I have work and enough money to buy branded brand. I rather choice it because for its more attractive and comfortable. One thing also branded is not easy damages rather than

Emitation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify plausible reasons for buying too many clothes, including fashion, limited-edition branded items, and discounts, and you offer possible measures such as limiting production and government action. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the reasons are listed rather than explained, and the proposed measures are unclear or not directly persuasive to consumers. For example, “companies must limit there production” is a supply-side suggestion, while the question asks how people can be persuaded to buy less. Your personal example explains why you would choose branded clothes, but it does not show how to reduce purchases. The response is also below the required 250 words, leaving both parts insufficiently developed. Explain each point and give a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: you introduce the topic, use “Secondly” and “Lastly” to signal later points, and separate ideas into paragraphs. This gives the reader a rough sense of the response’s structure. However, there is no clear overall progression from causes to practical ways of persuading consumers, and several links are repetitive or unclear. Phrases such as “One thing also” recur without showing how the next point relates to the previous one. The final paragraph shifts to your preference for branded clothing rather than concluding or developing a solution. Use one paragraph for causes and another for solutions, connect each explanation explicitly, and finish with a brief conclusion that answers both questions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “fashion,” “limited edition,” “discount,” “production,” and “exportation,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices, forms, and spellings make ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “fashiones people,” “happeness,” “ideal giving a discount,” and “Emitation”; these do not express the intended meanings clearly or naturally. Repeated phrases such as “one thing also” and “more people” also restrict precision. Build a small set of accurate expressions for consumer behaviour and solutions, such as “impulse buying,” “fast fashion,” “advertise discounts,” and “raise awareness,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer clauses, for example, “One thing also that's why they buy more clothes because…” and “Especially the government much serious on the exportation of clothes because…”. However, these longer attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation can make the meaning hard to follow. In “more people are happy and involving in fashion,” the verb forms do not fit together; “companies must limit there production” also contains an incorrect possessive form. Several sentences lack a clear grammatical structure, including “Base on my expression about these situation because of technology and fashiones people.” Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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