Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In my own opinion people nowadays is a impulsive buyer because of the cellphone and internet so they can buy online easier.They also buy many clothes because other people like passions.They buy clothes when they liked it even its pricey.Its ok to buy many clothes but make sure you have a plenty of money.They also buy many clothes because some have discount like 50% and is very affordable.

I think its difficult to reduced buying many clothes especially the people who have money and love passions.We cannot question their own life.They buy wat they want to wear.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify several relevant reasons for buying too many clothes, including convenient online shopping, following other people’s fashion choices, and discounts. You also briefly recognise that reducing purchases may be difficult for people who have money and enjoy fashion. However, the task asks both why this happens and how people can be persuaded to buy fewer clothes, and the response gives almost no practical ways to persuade them. The ideas are also asserted rather than explained or supported with examples. The response is 97 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 250 words; this leaves too little space to develop both parts of the question. To improve, explain the causes and propose specific measures, such as budgeting, repairing clothes, or campaigns about the environmental impact of fast fashion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it first lists reasons for buying clothes and then shifts to the difficulty of reducing purchases. This gives the reader a simple overall direction, and phrases such as “I think” signal a change in focus. However, most ideas are placed in one paragraph and linked mainly by repeated use of “because” and “also,” so the relationships between points are not developed clearly. The final paragraph does not provide a solution, despite the task asking how people can be persuaded. Organise the answer into separate paragraphs for causes and solutions, and use linking phrases to show explanation or contrast—for example, explain how online convenience encourages impulse buying, then introduce a practical response with “To address this…”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “online,” “discount,” “affordable,” and “buy,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the vocabulary is repetitive, especially the repeated phrase “buy many clothes,” and several expressions are inaccurate or unclear, such as “other people like passions” and “love passions.” These choices make it difficult to understand precisely whether you mean fashion trends or personal preferences. Build a wider range of accurate clothing-related vocabulary and use natural collocations, such as “follow fashion trends,” “make impulse purchases,” and “spend beyond one’s budget.” Check spelling and word forms as well, since “wat” and “passions” do not communicate the intended ideas clearly in this context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You mainly use short, simple statements, with a few attempts to connect ideas using “because” and “especially.” This allows some basic meaning to come through, but the range of sentence structures is narrow and errors occur in basic patterns. For example, “people nowadays is” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “a impulsive buyer” has an article error. “It’s difficult to reduced” uses the wrong verb form, and “when they liked it” shifts tense unnecessarily. Punctuation and spacing also need attention, as in “easier.They” and “pricey.Its.” Practise accurate present-tense sentences first, then combine related ideas using clauses such as “because” or “although.” Proofread for agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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