Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.
What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, many people buy far too many clothes. this issue with all people in countries. It is not good thing.
Firstly, Some people make a different brand in clothes and collectiondns. They can advertisement in different countries. Some brand are very expensive. But some brqand are reasonable price. When people look Tv shows and drama mostly women focus on other women clothes. social media is top of list for adviertisment. Mnay people use social media every day and nowadays instagram is very famous in fashioning. People want look beautiful in others people. it is a big reason to buy clothes. In addition, Female spend more money on the clothes. Some woemen compare to an other women in beauty. many people shows states in the society and they want other people think he is a rich person. For example, many people like photo and video shoot everyday. and when they make three or four videos in one dress then again its dress wear dont again use this dress. Some people buy online clothes and some people visit different shops and mall for clothes.
On the other hand, If reduce the number of clothes they buy I think its possible. We should learn value of money and this money use an ither things like learn different skills and you invest this money in bussiness. I think we should run one compain for poor people and help poor people in the society. If some person have more money he should help relitives and spend money on poor children
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You address both questions: you identify advertising, social media, fashion comparisons and status-seeking as reasons, then suggest valuing money and using it for skills, business or helping others. These are relevant ideas, but they are mostly listed rather than explained. For example, you say that people want to “look beautiful” and appear rich, but do not clearly show how these pressures lead to buying excessive clothing. The solutions also need a direct link to reducing purchases; donating money or helping relatives is not, by itself, a clear way to persuade people to buy fewer clothes. Develop a few points with explanation or examples, and state practical measures such as promoting clothing reuse or limiting fashion advertising.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is a basic overall structure: the first section gives reasons, and “On the other hand” introduces possible responses. Connectors such as “Firstly” and “In addition” also signal some relationships between ideas. However, progression within the main section is difficult to follow because advertising, women’s appearance, social status, videos and shopping are introduced in quick succession without clear grouping. Some links are unclear, and the final suggestions form a list rather than a developed conclusion. Use separate, focused paragraphs for causes and solutions, and organise each around one main point. Clearer referencing and transitions would also help readers see how each example supports the point being made.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “advertisement,” “social media,” “fashion” and “society,” so the reader can identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “a different brand in clothes and collectiondns” and “fashioning” do not express the ideas clearly, while “states in the society” appears to mean social status. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “adviertisment,” “Mnay” and “bussiness.” Build a more accurate set of phrases for consumer behaviour and solutions, and check spelling and collocations carefully. The suggestions below offer more natural alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
Most sentences rely on simple patterns, and attempts to connect ideas sometimes produce incomplete or faulty structures. Examples include “this issue with all people in countries,” which lacks a complete verb structure, and “People want look beautiful in others people,” where the infinitive and comparison are not formed correctly. Agreement and articles are also inconsistent, as in “Some brand are” and “It is not good thing.” Capitalisation and punctuation errors, including lowercase sentence openings and sentence fragments after full stops, further affect accuracy. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check articles, plural agreement and punctuation. A wider range of controlled sentence patterns would make your explanations easier to understand.
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