Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In few areas of the globe, individuals spend a large chunk of money on too many apparels. There can be several reasons for this and there are few ways by which this habit can be changed.

First and foremost reason is, social media influencers promoting new brands and their clothing. Due to which young generation gets influenced and ends up buying new clothes. For example, there are enormous people who makes TikTok videos and Instagram reels but only few of them have fan following in millions and these influencers are contacted by brands to promote their latest launch. Teenagers fear of loosing it out from latest trends and buy this clothes.

Secondly, many people believe that there should be different outfits available for them for every occasion, season and everyday life. This mindset of individuals is I think the biggest reason for spending money on clothes which are unnecessary. For instance, I have a friend who has tons of outfits for him that he has worn only once, but whenever we go for an event he buys new clothes for it.

People can be convinced to loose grip on clothes they buy by, making them understand that they do not need to fill every shelf of wardrobe by purchasing unuseful clothing items.In addtion, there should be some content creatos who style clothing in new ways by the clothes that are already sitting in wardrobe.

In conclusion, I think influencers and individuals mindset are the main reason by which people buy so many apparels. And human beings can reduce buying new garments by makking them understand what's necessary and what is not.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both parts of the question and maintain a clear view: social-media promotion and the belief that different occasions require new outfits encourage overbuying, while awareness and styling existing clothes are proposed as solutions. The examples—a friend who buys clothes for events and influencers promoting launches—make the causes relevant. This meets the task well, but the solutions are less fully developed than the reasons: “making them understand” is broad, and the role of creators who restyle existing clothes could be explained with a clearer example or practical impact. To strengthen the response, explain how awareness might change purchasing decisions and add another concrete way to persuade consumers, such as promoting clothing swaps or repair.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two paragraphs explaining causes, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “First and foremost,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the argument. The progression is generally logical, although some links feel mechanical, and the opening of the solutions paragraph is awkwardly punctuated (“by, making them understand”). The sentence beginning “Due to which” is also detached from the preceding idea, interrupting the flow. Use complete sentences and connect each example directly to the point it supports. More precise referencing and smoother transitions between the causes and proposed solutions would make the organisation feel more natural and controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “social media influencers,” “latest trends,” “outfits,” and “wardrobe,” and you attempt less common expressions such as “a large chunk” and “fan following.” However, some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “apparels” is not normally used this way, “loose grip on clothes” does not express reducing purchases, and “unuseful clothing items” is awkward. There are also spelling errors, including “loosing,” “addtion,” and “creatos.” These do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and control. Prefer common, accurate collocations and check spelling; for example, use “buy fewer clothes” and “unnecessary items” rather than forcing unusual phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “a friend who has tons of outfits” and a reason clause beginning “Due to.” Meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems remain. “Due to which young generation gets influenced” is a fragment, while “there are enormous people who makes” has an agreement error. Other examples include “Teenagers fear of” and “buy this clothes,” where the sentence patterns and demonstrative agreement are not controlled. The comma in “First and foremost reason is,” also interrupts the sentence. Build complete clauses, check subject–verb agreement and singular/plural forms, and punctuate sentence boundaries carefully. More consistently accurate complex sentences would improve control.

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