Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Buying clothes excessfully and following modes and models is a subject of debats in nowadays.

There is many people in some parts of the world, who buy far too many clothes. And in my opinions, i think that's because they are in an environment where mode is very important and primordial for everybody. Like in the big cities par exemple in Milan which is very famous by fashion, somebody who don't wear a nice clothes or the same costume everyday will be considered like a poor person. And this make peoples running to buy new clothes because the apparance is very important and go first before your knowledge or your competance. Also in place like Los Angelos which is the city of stars and famous people so it oblige you to follow the fashion and to buy clothes from the luxious brand to feel special and like everybody in this city.

And i think there is a sollution of this fact. If you have many clothes and spend much money in this think you must also sell your old clothes or others that you don't wear. And there is many websites and applications that make this very easy and with just a simple pictures you can sell and make money from the clothes you don't use.

Also i think the goverment and famous people like movie stars or famous singer must do some work to reduce this problem and make publicity or spots that advise people to not judge others with ther apperiance or with what there wear or also do some interviews with simple clothes and not just wearing famous and luxious brand, and tell there publics that it's normal to wear the same clothes or customs in more than one evenement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: social pressure and fashion-conscious settings are given as reasons for overbuying, while reselling unwanted items and public campaigns are proposed as solutions. The examples of Milan and Los Angeles help make the first explanation more concrete. However, the reasons are mostly asserted rather than explained in depth, and the solutions are not fully developed: for example, you do not explain how resale would reduce overall purchasing rather than simply circulate clothes. Your position is present, but the response would be stronger if each main idea were supported with a clearer explanation or a specific example, and if you showed how the proposed campaigns could change buying habits.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: it introduces the issue, discusses reasons, and then presents two solutions. This makes the main direction understandable. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the long section about Milan and Los Angeles, where several claims are joined together without clear steps. Connectors such as “And” and “Also” are repeated, and phrases like “this fact” do not clearly identify the point being referred to. Use separate paragraphs for the reasons and solutions, and organise each around one central idea. More precise linking phrases and clearer references would help the reader follow how each example supports your argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “fashion,” “luxurious brand,” “appearance,” “sell,” and “reduce this problem,” so the subject is generally clear. There is also some effort to use less common expressions, such as “primordial” and “considered.” However, frequent spelling and word-choice problems make the language noticeably inaccurate: examples include “excessfully,” “debats,” “modes,” “competance,” and “publics.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “following modes and models” and “make publicity.” Build a more reliable range of collocations for consumer behaviour and social pressure, and check spelling and word forms carefully. This would make your ideas easier to understand and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You try to form longer sentences using clauses and reasons, for example, “because they are in an environment where mode is very important” and the sentence beginning “Also in place like Los Angelos.” However, the range is limited, and attempts to combine several ideas often produce faulty sentence structures. There are frequent problems with subject–verb agreement (“There is many people”), articles and plurals (“a nice clothes”), and verb forms (“somebody who don't wear”). Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, especially where long clauses are joined with “And” or “Also.” These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking agreement and punctuation.

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