Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowdays, purchasing new clothes on regular basis has become a trend in current generation specially in some developed countries such as the USA, Australia, Canada and Paris and France. This eassy will not only explain the reasons behind this trend but also suggest the some possible measures people can take to reverse this trend.

One of the major reason is social media influence, in the era everyone have their own smart phones and social media accounts, which made it easy for them to know about latest global trend and fashion. Therefore, to made themselves upto dates people continousely spend money on new clothes. In addition, In fashion industery designs life is too small, not more than a month. A same design was in a high demand last month, next month no one want to buy that design. Consequently, new generation have not choice instead of shopping current trendy clothes.

However, there is few step individuals can take, if they want to reduce number of clothes they buy. Firstly, instead of funkey and printed design clothes purchase plan clothes such as polo t-shirt, white and black t-shirts with any print of it. This kind of colthes people can wear anywhere and anytime, this clothes are always in demand and never get old fashion. Secondly, buy clothes in this way, where you can carry one shirt with different colour pants. For example, light blue shirt people can wear this with black, grey, dark bule pant, with this people can mix mach there clothes and with limited cabinate collection individual can carry new dress everyday.

In conclusion, undoubtedly social media and fruquentely change clothing trend are work like fuel in this trend, whereas with people planning before going for shopping. we can reverse this trend.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for excessive clothing consumption and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as the influence of social media and the rapid turnover of fashion trends. However, the development is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of 'fashion industry designs life is too small' is a bit vague and could have been expanded with more specific examples of 'fast fashion' business models. The solutions provided are practical, though the suggestion to buy 'plain clothes' is a bit simplistic. Overall, the response covers all requirements but lacks the depth of analysis expected at higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for reasons and solutions, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'One of the major reason', 'In addition', 'However', and 'Firstly'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate (e.g., 'In conclusion, undoubtedly social media and fruquentely change clothing trend are work like fuel'). The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band for coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors ('Nowdays', 'eassy', 'industery', 'fruquentely', 'cabinate') and word choice issues ('funkey', 'mix mach'). While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'global trend' and 'fashion industry', the range is limited. The errors in spelling and word formation are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not fully impede communication. To improve, the student should focus on accurate spelling and using more sophisticated collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('everyone have', 'there is few step'), incorrect verb forms ('to made themselves', 'to reverse this trend'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices and run-on sentences. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar structures limits the score. A greater focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and tense consistency is required.

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