Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There is no shadow of doubt that people love to try new brand. Considering this, in some areas of the globe, people prefer to purchase more in order to look smart or showing high status. And there some ways to encourage them for reduce the number of cloths they purchase, which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs and also with the relevant examples.

To begin with, the reasons why people have this kind of attitude. The first and foremost reason is following their role model or we can say their favourite celebrities. To explain this, as celebrities giving ads for promoting the brand and their new collection toward their follower in order to increase the sale, people try follow them as look smart and being seen cool and showing to society they follow trend. For example, a survey was done in India, in which they found that 70% sales was rise in amazon app when ads of Punjabi suit given by famous Bollywood celebrity Alia Bhatt did. Therefore, people buy a cloth that they like no matter they needed or not which leads to too many cloths in their closet.

Moving further, there are number of ways to change their mindset toward buying too many cloths. As if they can make aware about importance of money. To elaborate this, in this contemporary world, with the passage of time every thing become expensive, if they spent more amount on cloths then they are not able to save money. So, they need to make a smart choice instead to buying too many cloths. And also, parents should motivate their kids reuse their attire's and they not needed to follow their friends regarding this way. In other words ask them if they need then buy, but they purchase in order to impress or showing to their friends then no needed.

Overall, in this contemporary world, people prefer to purchase too many cloths owing to following their role models or showing their status and by awareness as well as parents motivation or guidance they can work on this habit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for excessive clothing consumption and strategies for reduction. The ideas are relevant, such as the influence of celebrities and the importance of financial awareness. However, the development is somewhat limited. The example regarding the Indian survey is specific, but the explanation of how to persuade people is a bit repetitive and lacks depth. To reach a higher band, you should provide more nuanced arguments, such as the role of 'fast fashion' marketing or the environmental impact of consumerism, rather than focusing primarily on parental guidance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Moving further', and 'Overall'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'And there some ways' or 'As if they can make aware'. Additionally, some sentences are fragmented or lack smooth transitions between clauses, which occasionally disrupts the flow of the argument. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help achieve a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'contemporary world', 'role model', and 'attire'. However, there are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'try new brand' (should be 'brands'), 'cloths' (should be 'clothes'), and 'ads of Punjabi suit given by' (should be 'advertisements for... featuring'). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. Expanding your range of collocations and ensuring correct word forms will improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include missing articles ('the' brand), incorrect verb forms ('celebrities giving ads' instead of 'celebrities give ads'), and subject-verb agreement errors ('every thing become expensive'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to limit the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.

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