Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.
What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In todays fashion era, individuals are keen to buy new variety types clothes without thinking a second. Some people argue that visitors are buying more clothes than they need. The main reason is attractive fashion clothes.
One primary reason is that, Individuals, mostly women are interested to do shopping stylist clothes, because those clothes gives them confidence and make their personality. For example, In super markets, when they see the clothes on statue, they feels like this will suite on them, they will also think when they want to wear that dress. Hence, they buy that, without watching the material or quality, just looking at style. Second main reason is that some others culture clothes are more stylist and because citizen do not seen them often they like to purchase those clothes.
To prevent this, one should check the quality first and then price and should think about the occasion. for example, people should buy some routine clothes and some traditional value clothes, so they can wear casually as well as on work. However, online shopping is also in trend, it makes people to buy more things they do not need and waste of money.
In a nutshell, whenever people buy clothes they should not only think about style but also check their quality and should encourage them to avoid window shopping.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for excessive clothing consumption and suggesting ways to reduce it. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat superficial. The arguments regarding 'attractive fashion' and 'cultural clothes' are not fully extended, and the suggestions for reduction are brief. Furthermore, the response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the depth of the response and results in a penalty. To improve, you should aim to provide more detailed explanations and concrete examples for each point raised.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is some attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'One primary reason', 'Second main reason', and 'In a nutshell'. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive. The logical progression of ideas is present but could be strengthened by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed theme. The referencing is sometimes unclear, which affects the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'do shopping stylist clothes' and 'citizen do not seen them often'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is a reliance on basic terms. To achieve a higher score, you should focus on using more precise collocations and a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to consumerism and fashion, while ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical form.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'those clothes gives them', 'they feels like'), article usage, and word order. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and detract from the overall quality of the writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors would be beneficial.
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