Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowdays, fashion is very essential part of our live. In certain parts of the world, individuals buying too many clothes. This essay will discuss the reasons behind this aspect and also explain some measures that help people to reduce the purchasing of clothes.

To begin with, there are a plethors of reasons of buying too many clothes. First, some people show off their wealth and status by wearing branded clothes. As a result, this approach affected the poor people who are not able to buy branded clothes because they are more expensive. Second, fashionable clothes help people to look more confident. For instance, people are going for the interview and they wearing a comfortable and fashionable clothes because first impression is the last impression, they will look good and confident which will help them to answer the questions more confidently. The last but not least, certain people buying many clothes because through shopping they feel very happy. For instance, some individuals are more likely to purchase different kinds of brand and new items when arrival, they feel glad by weraing them and they feel some kind of achievement.

Furthermore, buying too many clothes is also a waste of money. People should encourage each other to spend their money wisely. They can set a specfic amount in every month that they will spend on purchasing clothes. In this way, they will not be able to spend to much money on buying clothes. As a result, this will help them to reduce the number of clothes they buy.

In a nutshell, although there are various reasons of buying many clothes such as show off wealth, several kinds of clothes helps people to look confident, and happy, but they can also reduce the shopping of clothes by setting a specfic amount.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the task, discussing the reasons why people buy many clothes (such as showing wealth, boosting confidence, and seeking emotional happiness) and suggesting solutions like budgeting. The ideas are relevant and generally well-developed, although some points, such as the interview example, are a bit repetitive and conversational. The position is clear throughout the essay. However, the development of ideas tends to rely on general statements rather than deeper extension, placing the response solidly in the Band 6 category. To reach a higher band, the student should provide more elaborated, insightful examples and fully flesh out the arguments without relying on superficial repetition.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into four logical paragraphs: an introduction, two body paragraphs covering reasons and solutions respectively, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used to signal progression, such as 'To begin with', 'Second', 'Furthermore', and 'In a nutshell'. However, some cohesive links and referencing feel somewhat mechanical or repetitive, and paragraph internal progression can be slightly disjointed. For instance, the transition into the solution paragraph is a bit abrupt. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately overall. This performance aligns with the Band 6 descriptor, where the essay has a coherent overall arrangement but contains faults in referencing and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'plethora', 'branded clothes', and 'purchasing of clothes'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, including 'Nowdays' instead of nowadays, 'live' instead of life, 'individuals buying' lacking an auxiliary verb, 'plethors' for plethora, 'specfic' for specific, and 'weraing' for wearing. These errors indicate a lack of precision, though they do not impede overall communication. Because the vocabulary range is sufficient but marred by frequent lexical and spelling inaccuracies, a Band 5.5 or Band 6 is appropriate; given that meaning remains clear, a Band 6 is awarded.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and conditional structures. However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are several noticeable errors, such as missing auxiliary verbs in 'individuals buying too many clothes', tense inconsistencies like 'people are going for the interview and they wearing', preposition errors, and frequent spelling slips. Punctuation is generally acceptable, but sentence structures often falter when attempting complexity. Because the errors occur frequently and cause some distraction for the reader, the writing fits the Band 5 descriptors well, although the presence of a few successful complex structures prevents a lower score.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.