Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are few people who love to do so much shooping of clothes. There are plethora of reasons behind it yet some sensible solutions are also availabe to grave this concern which will be elaborated in the upcoming paragraphs.

The First and formost reason behind it is that the trend changes in every few months now. To make it clear, people are more relativel active on social media applications that shows people arround the world with different type of clothes. it would attract people to buy new more clothes as trend and people buy more clothes.Another reason behind it that folks and yougsters have their specific idol they follow.Furthermore, young generation watch their idol buying new clothes which they just bought for the advertisment and easily get distracted to get clothes like them. For example, Virat Kohli is famous athelets he launch his new clothing company after retirement from one sport and that become trend on the social media and people started buying ruthlessly.

To solve this issue there are some measures that could be taken. First, provinding financial knowledge to the youngsters in school. In addition, at the early age they understand how to manage their money on things that could improve the way people spend money on the clothes. To examplify, one oragnisation in the europe started free of cost finnacial education in the local young generation group, that leads to help them understand to manage their money wisely. Thus, people started spending more money on neccessary thing rather than more clothes.

To coclude, people buy more clothes getting influenced by idol and trends, yet could be sloved by providing right education of financial money management at the early age.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for excessive clothing purchases (such as rapid trend changes and social media influencer culture) and offering a solution (financial education in schools). The main ideas are relevant and generally supported with an example, such as mentioning Virat Kohli and European youth programs. However, the development of ideas lacks depth in places, and some arguments are slightly repetitive or over-generalized. For instance, the link between social media and consumer behavior is stated rather than fully explored. Overall, the response covers all parts of the task satisfactorily, earning a Band 6.0 in line with descriptors that require addressing all parts with relevant ideas, even if some are under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to divide the response into logical paragraphs for introduction, reasons, solutions, and conclusion. However, cohesion is often faulty or mechanical. Words and phrases like 'The First and formost reason', 'To make it clear', and 'To coclude' display awkward transitions. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'grave this concern' in the introduction. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within paragraphs suffers from repetitive phrasing and weak connective links. These issues point directly to Band 5.0, where organisation is present and progression can be followed, but cohesive devices are inaccurate or over-used, and referencing is sometimes problematic.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate to the topic, including terms like 'plethora of reasons', 'sensible solutions', and 'financially educated'. However, there are numerous spelling errors ('shooping', 'availabe', 'formost', 'arround', 'athelets', 'launch', 'examplify', 'oragnisation', 'finnacial', 'neccessary', 'coclude', 'sloved') and word-choice inaccuracies ('grave this concern' instead of 'address this concern', 'ruthlessly' instead of 'extravagantly'). These lexical errors and frequent misspellings impede readability. While the vocabulary is adequate to convey the basic message, the density of spelling and collocation errors keeps the lexical score at a Band 5.0, as noticeable errors cause some difficulty for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and subordinate structures (e.g., 'yet some sensible solutions are also availabe to grave this concern which will be elaborated'). However, grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text. There are frequent errors in verb tense, article usage, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'trend changes in every few months', 'social media applications that shows', 'folks and yougsters have their specific idol they follow', and 'right education of financial money management'. Punctuation is also erratic in places. These persistent errors place the essay firmly at Band 5.0, where attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty and errors cause some difficulty for the reader.

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