Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modern Globe, individiuals of several nations are spending their money on clothes lavishly. In this eassy i will shed the light on the reasons as well define possible soluotions of this norm.

To initate with, People nowadays follow the trend of social media and also tend towards influncers and celebraties. These people get money from brands for doing advertisements of clothes which eventually find more suitable to buy and showing there empthy towards famous people. In result consumers packed their closets with several rubbish dresses. For instance, Majority of civialions bought avengers costumes which they just stored after the trend over.

Moreover, Womens are always keen to buy new clothes beacuse they priortise dresses only for one time whether they love it or not. Afterwards most womens like to buy new one as they assert clothes delicates there social status.

To solve this, everyone should be more adquete about their spending and assert to save some money for future. It is good to buy new clothes beacuse it enhance the personaility of people but always keep in mind that for special kind of dresses we still depend on several animals and insects. Other than them if industries make clothes from artificial things that will be harmful of humans. Secondly clothes are just basic, People definately judge someone if somebody have ribbed clothes but more branding and expensive attire also jealous them so it is not a wise idea to buy clothes just for showoff.

In conclussion, Although people have numerous reasons to buy new clothes but they could use clothes more than one time which will be fruitful for them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for excessive clothing purchases such as social media influence and shifting fashion trends, and suggesting solutions like mindful spending. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and contains generalisations. For instance, the point regarding women buying clothes only for one time is a broad assumption and lacks deep elaboration. The position of the writer is generally clear throughout the essay, but the arguments would benefit from more specific, fully extended examples rather than brief mentions, such as the avengers costumes example which remains slightly underdeveloped. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, placing this performance at Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt at paragraphing, separating the introduction, reasons, solutions, and conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. Transitional phrases like 'To initate with', 'In result', and 'In conclussion' contain spelling and grammatical errors that draw attention. Furthermore, referencing is not always clear, such as the ambiguous pronoun use in 'Other than them if industries make clothes...'. Paragraphing is used, but the logical progression between sentences within paragraphs occasionally feels disjointed, leading to a Band 5.5 score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student attempts less common vocabulary, such as 'lavishly', 'empthy', and 'delicates', but these attempts are frequently marred by spelling and word-choice errors that impede precise communication. Words like 'eassy', 'individiuals', 'influncers', 'celebraties', 'civialions', 'womens', 'adquete', and 'personaility' demonstrate persistent spelling issues. While the range is minimally adequate for discussing the topic of consumerism and clothing, the high frequency of lexical and spelling errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Therefore, a score of 5.0 is appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, verb forms, and prepositions, such as 'consumers packed their closets' instead of 'consumers pack', 'beacuse they priortise dresses only for one time', and 'harmful of humans' instead of 'harmful to humans'. Punctuation is also erratic, with missing apostrophes and incorrect capitalisation in places. Although the meaning can mostly be deciphered, the high density of structural and grammatical inaccuracies places this response firmly at Band 5.0.

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