Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In various regions, a huge number of garments are purchased excessively by consumers. The reasons include rapidly changing fashion trends and desire of showing off on Internet. Awareness must be raised to slow down this development and to have a cahnge for the betterment.

The prominent reason behind the development is the fast paced change in the fashion trends. People spend on new styles when it comes to attire. Moreover, the eagerness of showing off on social media has contributed towards the heavy purchasing of dresses. for instance, People do not like to post on instagram with same clothes and look and hence acquire more than needed wearables. Alluring offers and deals are also attract the masses to buy more and more clothes.

In order to change the trend and to made public spend less on apparels, awareness must be raised. Many pf the public groups and non profit organizations can contribute to do so with the help of public figures and influencers. For example, renowned social media faces can start a trend of rewearing the same dresses. So that atleast their followers can follow that approach and this will help to make a change.

To conclude, spending money on new clothes and purchasing in bulk is a matter of personal level that can not be compressed but things like changing styles and trends contibute more towards such developments that can overcome by changing it with awareness

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for excessive clothing purchases such as changing fashion trends and the desire to show off on social media, while also suggesting solutions like raising awareness through influencers. However, the ideas are somewhat generalized and lack deep extension. Furthermore, there is a penalty to consider because the task requires a minimum of 250 words, and the student's response contains only 237 words. This under-length issue prevents the response from fully developing the arguments to reach a higher band. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed in terms of scope and depth. Band Score: 5.5

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The text is organized into four paragraphs with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing causes and solutions, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover', 'for instance', and 'In order to change'. However, some referencing is imprecise, and paragraph transitions feel a bit mechanical. For example, 'The prominent reason behind the development' links back to the introduction, but the flow between sentences can be disjointed. Paragraphing is present and generally appropriate for the task type. Band Score: 6.0

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, featuring terms like 'garments', 'attire', 'eagerness', and 'non profit organizations'. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, but these are sometimes accompanied by spelling or word-choice errors, such as 'cahnge' instead of 'change' and 'made public spend' instead of 'make the public spend'. Collocations are occasionally unnatural, such as 'desire of showing off' instead of 'desire to show off'. Overall, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey meaning, but errors prevent it from reaching a higher band. Band Score: 5.5

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'People spend on new styles when it comes to attire' and 'In order to change the trend and to made public spend less on apparels, awareness must be raised.' However, there are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, including 'are also attract', 'Many pf the public groups', and 'that can overcome by changing it with awareness' (passive voice misuse). Punctuation errors also appear, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters ('for instance'). These errors occasionally cause slight difficulty for the reader. Band Score: 5.0

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