Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In parts of nation, chunk of individuals purchase bundles of cloths for some reasons for examples parties and office wears. But there is some techniques which can help to reduce the number of cloths they purchase which i will discuss in upcoming paragraphs.

In this modern era we have unlimited variety of cloths which is help us to upgrade our style of living and so far society also judge person by their cloths for example if person is attending a weding and that time person only think about the cloths because he or she always want to look for different and attrative in a group of people. Moreover, their are some important think to remember people can wear same cloths style anywhere because cloths are totally design according to the sitution and environment.

However,their are some tips and tricks which can help individuals to reduce their purchasing for cloths by selecting that cloths which can suitable for various events and environment like black and white wears for example if person thinks to buy black pants it going to suit with many other colours. Moreover, individuals should also think to buy reuseable cloths which can also suitable for your pocket and help environment by reducding pollution. Also people should reduce to buy much over fashioned cloths because it can only wear for two or three times and after that they need to through them and it may cause big loss to income.

In my conclusion, always think to buy affortable and usefull cloths which can suitable and comfortable with any outfits and always think to donate your cloths to needy person.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing reasons why people buy too many clothes, such as social status and events like weddings, and offering solutions like buying versatile or reusable clothing. However, the ideas are somewhat limited and lack deep development. Phrases like 'bundles of cloths for some reasons' are very vague. The position is generally clear, but the support and examples tend to be repetitive and over-generalized rather than fully extended. This places the response in Band 5.0 for this criterion, as it addresses the task and presents relevant ideas, but the development remains basic and lacks specific, well-rounded examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is frequently interrupted by poor referencing, punctuation errors, and awkward formatting. Cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'However' are used, but their mechanical application does not always establish a logical relationship between sentences. For example, sentences run together without adequate punctuation, creating a somewhat disjointed reading experience. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is faulty. These characteristics align with a Band 5.0 descriptor, where there is some organization and paragraphing, but overall progression and cohesion are inadequate.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that impede fluent reading. Examples include 'cloths' instead of 'clothes', 'weding' instead of 'wedding', 'attrative' instead of 'attractive', 'sitution' instead of 'situation', 'reuseable', 'reducding', and 'affortable'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'upgrade our style of living', but the high frequency of basic lexical errors and incorrect word forms restricts the score to a Band 4.5 or 5.0. Because the vocabulary is minimally adequate for conveying basic intent despite errors, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the text. The writer relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences often result in run-on sentences, such as 'In this modern era we have unlimited variety of cloths which is help us to upgrade our style of living and so far society also judge person by their cloths...' Subject-verb agreement errors ('which is help', 'there is some techniques', 'their are some important think') and missing articles ('person', 'weding') are pervasive. The range of structures is limited, and frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader, placing this response firmly in Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.0 based on positive achievement of basic communication.

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