Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Clothes have been part of fashion. In many parts of the world a rapid growth on buying clothes can be observed. Where people tend to buy too many clothes. This essay intends to discuss the reason behind this and how people can prevent from buying a number of clothes. Let us discuss in detail.

To commence with, nowadays clothes have become a symobol of fashion. People who want to look updated and trendy and stylish are always keen towards to shop more often. Moreover, some people are got stuck in this rat race. They constanly follow the society, and are always under the pressure to look good. Which ultimately maked them buy clothes by which they can confidently live in the society. Furthermore, people are afraid of being judged. Individulas who don not shop according to trend and wear old clothes are often persumed as poor and not interesting. As a result, people choose to make distance from them and stop socialising with them. Lastly, social media is a prominant cause of this. People get easily influenced from it. They are always keen to follow trends of outer cities or countries. For instance, people nowadays are so much induldge into Korean clothes. They are so much stock that one can buy them from local streets also.

However, on the other hand, certain steps should be taken to presuade people from buying clothes. Social media can help to change people's opinion from buying unnecssary clothes. It should run some adds which spread awareness on wastage of resources. Moreover, older generation should teach the youngest ones about the value of money. Instead they should save it for future. Lastly, individulas should be open minded and should not stuck in the rat race. They have to control themselves from copying others while staying in budget and limit obn clothing rather than fitting into the society.

To sum up, although clothes are the symbol of status and richness but one should not stock up too many which can cause environmental problems, wastage of money and other precious resources.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the task, examining both the reasons why people buy too many clothes and how they can be persuaded to reduce this behavior. A clear position is maintained throughout the essay. The reasons provided, such as the pressure of fashion, social media influence, and the fear of being judged, are relevant and extended with examples like Korean clothing trends. The solutions proposed, including awareness campaigns on social media and parental guidance, are practical and directly address the second part of the prompt. While some ideas could be explored in greater depth, the response fully satisfies the requirements of Band 6.5, leaning towards Band 7 for its clear task coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a generally coherent overall arrangement with logical paragraphing separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as "To commence with", "Moreover", and "Furthermore". However, some cohesive links feel mechanical or awkward, such as "Let us discuss in detail" and the abrupt sentence fragments like "Which ultimately maked them buy clothes". Referencing is occasionally unclear, and paragraph transitions could be smoother. Overall, the organizational structure is adequate for a Band 6, showing clear logical progression despite some flawed cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items and topic-specific terms such as "symobol", "socialising", "prominant", and "environmental problems". However, there are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including "symobol" instead of symbol, "constanly", "Individulas", "persumed", "prominant", "induldge", "presuade", "unnecssary", "adds", and "obn". These errors reflect a Band 6 level where vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the message, but frequent inaccuracies in spelling and collocation prevent access to higher band scores.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over grammar with structures like "People who want to look updated and trendy and stylish are always keen towards to shop more often." Nevertheless, there are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "some people are got stuck", "keen towards to shop", fragment sentences like "Which ultimately maked them buy clothes", and incorrect prepositions. Punctuation errors also occur. These errors occasionally cause strain for the reader, fitting comfortably within the Band 5.5 to 6 range where a mix of structures is offset by persistent grammatical inaccuracies.

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