Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Clothes are essential for people. In many part of the world, individuals buy too many clothes for somereason. This essay will discuss reasons for this trend with solutions to reduce the clothes waste.

There are numerous reasons for buying clothes. One of them is an affordability. This is because in the past clothes are expensive due to high prices of the materials, but these days it is cheper. As more materials available in the market. Therefore, it is convenient for people to buy more garments. Another reason is fashion. Everyone wants to follow actors an actresses as they are role model for society. Individuals follow their clothing style, and try to buy more attaire like them. To look more sophisticated and stylish.

There are many ways people can reduce the number of clothes they buy. It is dangerous for environment. People do not know the effects of clothing garbage on the environment. It is complex procedure to burn the clothes waste, also fire from that relese emission of carbon dioxide into the environment. For example, recent study conducted by The Times Of Prime shows that 50% of pollution creates by that fire. Moreover, individuals do not realise about their clothes collection as they like it and instantly buy it. Thus, sometimes they do impulsive buying and end up having too many clothes.

To conclude, this is a serious problem, which needs to be solve. This is not only harmful for the environment but also dangerous for the world. As it adds more litter to the globe. People needs to be more sensitive about this issue to mitigate this problem.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the reasons why people buy excessive clothes (affordability and fashion) and suggesting how this can be reduced (raising environmental awareness). However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and occasionally shifts focus. For instance, in the third paragraph, the discussion pivots towards the environmental dangers of burning clothes rather than directly explaining practical ways to persuade people to buy less, though environmental awareness is implied as a deterrent. The position is generally clear, but some ideas are slightly under-developed. Therefore, it fits the Band 6 descriptor well, as it addresses all parts of the task with relevant ideas, though some parts could be more fully extended.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay has a coherent overall arrangement and is divided into logical paragraphs with a clear introduction and conclusion. However, cohesion at the sentence level is sometimes faulty or mechanical. For instance, transitional phrases like 'This is because in the past clothes are expensive' and 'Another reason is fashion' are a bit formulaic, and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'this is a serious problem' in the conclusion where the antecedent is broad. Paragraphing is used adequately to separate the introduction, reasons, solutions, and conclusion. This demonstrates the characteristics of Band 6, where the overall structure works, but cohesive devices and referencing show occasional lapses.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms like 'affordability', 'sophisticated', 'environment', and 'impulsive buying'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, such as 'somereason' instead of 'some reason', 'cheper' instead of 'cheaper', 'relese' instead of 'release', and 'attaire' instead of 'attire'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with some inaccuracy, which places the response securely at Band 6. The errors do not severely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score by preventing fluent and precise usage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'This essay will discuss reasons for this trend with solutions to reduce the clothes waste' and 'Everyone wants to follow actors an actresses as they are role model for society.' However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses ('in the past clothes are expensive'), article usage, subject-verb agreement ('People needs to be'), and pluralisation ('In many part of the world'). While these errors are noticeable and detract from accuracy, the meaning remains largely clear, making this a solid representative of Band 5, where a limited range of structures and frequent errors persist.

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