Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Purchasing number of clothing items increases significantly among people of the particular location in the world.There are multiple reasons for this trend, but many approaches do exist to encourage individuals to minimise the products they buy. In this essay, my write up will show some causes as well as solution to this ongoing situation.

The first and foremost reason in this current scenario would be social media. Social media platforms such as Instagram and Facebook are the primary cause, from which people get to know about trending outfits. People generally purchase attire by getting influenced by their favourite film star or cricketers. As a result, they end up buying multiple clothes. Moreover, due to atmosphere of few countries, citizens must obliged to purchase various types of outfits to tackle from extreme weather conditions. When taking into consideration of India, dwellers are facing three weather throughout the year. Consequenly, variety of clothing is essential for them to survive.

Solution can't be easy in such sitations but few steps can be taken to minimise this approach. Government should imposed high amount of taxes on the prducts that are made from materials such as pure leather, which comes directly from animals. restrict the amount of such advertisements

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing reasons for excessive clothing purchases such as social media influence and climate, and suggesting solutions like government taxation. However, the ideas are underdeveloped and the essay suffers from a severe under-length penalty, containing only 204 words against the required 250-word minimum. The conclusion is incomplete, trailing off abruptly after the second solution. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, earning a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays some organizational structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and an attempt at a final section. However, the progression is disrupted by the abrupt ending of the text and mechanical use of cohesive devices like 'The first and foremost reason' and 'Moreover'. Paragraphing is partially neglected, as the conclusion runs into incomplete thoughts. Referencing is mostly clear, but the lack of a fully developed conclusion and the incomplete final sentence limit the overall coherence to a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student attempts a range of vocabulary with words like 'minimise', 'atmosphere', and 'consequenly', but encounters several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'Purchasing number of clothing items', 'must obliged', 'Consequenly', and 'prducts'. While meaning is generally conveyed for the most part, the limited range and noticeable errors place this performance firmly at Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Social media platforms such as Instagram and Facebook are the primary cause, from which people get to know about trending outfits.' However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles and incorrect verb forms like 'citizens must obliged to purchase' and 'Government should imposed high amount'. These errors can cause occasional difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5.0 descriptors.

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