Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes.

What are the reasons for this?
How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

These days, because of the social media trend, it has become very common to purchase new attire for each function. Because of this trend, people do more and more shopping for clothing. The reason why individuals are buying new clothes and throwing away the old ones is influence of social media celebrities. This trend can be changed if these celebrities can normalize the idea that repeating attire is normal.

In this technological world, almost 90 percent of people using social media platforms. The platforms has various famous celebrities who contributes in various platforms for example instagram, movies, web series through these platforms people are learning new trends of fasion world which incourage people to try new attire of different designs. All this happining because people want to maintain thenselves in the modern society. This society validate individuals on the bases of clothing. New fashionable means acceptance in society. While, repeatition of the dresses means embarresment. According to a research, in most of the reality shows and interview ce;ebrities and people who has influences on the society they do ot repeat attire because they want to maintain their status in the society, according to then if they would repeate the dresses they will concedered as individuals with low status. Therefore, to maintain the status in the society people keep buying clothes.

This trend can be changes if these high influence faces(celebrities) can normalize that it is comman repeating dresses. Social media, movies and webseries can play a crucial part in changing this trend. Movies celebrities should post videos and images on instrgram and other social media platforms in which ther are repeating attire. Their posts and interview will teach individuals that clothes are not the only factor that can provide you the acceptance in the society. There are other aspects such as, talent, good work for poor people, and many more thing which contribute in the society. Now a days, there are multiple videos on facebook and instagram in which celebrities are already motivating people to repeate chothes because throwing old clothe to buy new onces are only increasing the wastage of meterials which contibutes in waste landfill only.

To conclude, these days, people are getting influenced by celebrities and rich people to buy new clothes just to get validation of the society. all these happining because of highly influese faces. but this thend can be change if these celebrities want.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for excessive clothing purchases (social media trends and celebrity influence) and how people can be persuaded to reduce this behavior (normalization of outfit repeating by influencers). The position is clear throughout, and ideas are extended, such as explaining how societal validation is tied to fashion. However, there is a tendency to over-generalize and some arguments, like the social pressure to avoid embarrassment, are slightly repetitive. Overall, all parts of the task are well covered, fitting the criteria for Band 6.5 to 7.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing reasons and solutions respectively, and a conclusion. There is an overall progression of ideas; however, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or faulty (e.g., 'While, repeatition of the dresses means embarresment' and starting multiple sentences with 'Because of this trend' or 'All this happining'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and paragraphing could be managed with greater sophistication. This level of organization and cohesion aligns well with Band 6.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common terms such as 'validation', 'normalization', and 'status'. However, there are frequent spelling errors and lexical slips (e.g., 'attire' used repetitively, 'fasion', 'incourage', 'happining', 'thenselves', 'bases' instead of 'basis', 'repeatition', 'embarresment', 'ce;ebrities', 'do ot', 'then', 'concedered', 'comman', 'meterials', 'contibutes'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they noticeably lower the precision and fluency of the writing, placing it firmly at Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional and relative clauses (e.g., 'The reason why individuals are buying new clothes... is influence of social media celebrities'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'almost 90 percent of people using', 'The platforms has', 'people who has influences'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing ('if these celebrities can normalize the idea that repeating attire is normal'). These frequent errors can occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5.0 descriptors.

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